Moon lassos
a dreamscape,
my sanctuary,
mind lays,
trapped
in a chaotic fever.
Slow,
is time to heal wounds
reopened,
a cruel
and unusual punishment.
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prompt: picture
I msde the pic black and white.
Hope you don't mind
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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I think the picture being in black and white just adds to the effects of the words that you've penned on how one's thoughts process pain and learning to heal. Good luck in the contest.
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it's amazing what our minds can do to us...we can punish ourselves...severly...and add those things that cause us to wand in these moments of pain...truly takes its toll....daunting poetry...
this is...
Mal
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I love the image in black and white. It's not mine, it actually came from a site that centers on addiction. I was reading some recovery information and thought the picture spoke volumes. It has the same affect in black and white to me...
Your poem expounds on the tender emotions that sometimes resurface to test our will. They can be a help or hindrance in moving on. "Cruel" yes, often!
There is a somber mood written here, almost in reflection of whatever it is that has to be dealt with in your life. I like that fact that you penned a work that leads the reader into a solution, no matter the issue. Excellent take on the prompt poet.
Thank you for this entry and I wish you the best in the Comp!
Much Love & Many Blessings ♥
Renee
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The aches of emotional pain are swift to flood us with pain again just from the wrong shadow falling across the skin. Beautifully said.
Love, Tom B.
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This is great! Not sure what lassos means will have to look it up. Goodluck!
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The picture being black and white fits this pensive and poignant piece. If only we could turn away those thoughts of angst and pain, make it all okay again...
A superb write. Good luck in the contest
Dee
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Very nice, all the best in the contest,Di
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Excellent
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goodluck
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