Faeryn by Amera at All poetry

My loving daughter under wing,
she is my special loving thing.
A bond of love is there for all to see,
a core so deep in me.

A candle with a flame so bright,
a feeling that is O so right.
She makes me smile, she is so full of life,.
I know there is no strife.

I have a candle in my heart,
who gave me love right from the start.
She lights my heart and warms me when I pray,
so free, this girl named Tay.

Author notes

I'm proud to be Tay's AP mom.

Byr a thoddaid: (bir a thod-deyed):

This Celtic form consists of any number of quatrain stanzas. Each stanza combines one couplet of eight syllable lines a. a. and one couplet where the first line has ten syllables and the second line has six syllables, This couplet is called a toddaid byr.

There is no set order for the couplets.

In the ten syllable line the main rhyme b. b. is found before the end of the line and the last syllable of that line links the six syllable line by alliteration, assonance or secondary rhyme. Here is the form layout for either variation.

x x x x x x x a
x x x x x x x a
x x x x x x b x x c.
x c x x x b

or

x x x x x x d x x e.
x e x x x d
x x x x x x x f
x x x x x x x f

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A contest entry

Have fun with rhyme!!! Write a byr a thoddaid it's easy. by cricketjeff. 1100 points, ended March 2, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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DesolatELifE
June 19

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'Byr a thoddaid: (bir a thod-deyed): ' - I'm not sure that's the best way to spell its pronounciation.. I'd say 'bir a thoth-eyed', but I'd somehow need to emphasize how the second 'th' is pronounced the same way I pronounce it in 'the', while the first is the softer 'th', like in 'things'. The way you've got it just makes it sound like the double d isn't its own letter with it's own sound in Welsh

Lovely poem! Well written. I've just realised that I am not keen on inconsistent syllable counts.. That's good to know.
- Amera
  June 19
  
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  Syllable count is importiant but not as importiant as meter. Always read rhyming poetry out loud even your own. Here is a tool for your poetry bookmarks:
  http://www.uncg.edu/~htkirbys/meters.htm
- - DesolatELifE
    June 19
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    The reason certain things don't sound as good to me is simply because I read things too fast. I know that, and most things that don't sound good are usually fine once I read them again a lot slower. This one was fine and lovely the second time I read it =] I'll have a look at that link.. I'm always ready to learn anything I can.
Tirrell
December 17, 2008
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this makes for a very beautiful and easy read.
Sue Cardwell
March 3, 2008

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Congratulations on the silver. A beautiful tribute to a beautiful young lady and a lovely byr a thoddaid.

Love
Sue
cricketjeff
March 2, 2008
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This was a beautiful poem, and that counts for almost everything in a contest I run.
Mairi bheag
March 2, 2008
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I love the things you do for Tay.
Melodies
February 28, 2008

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Beautifully written, dear poet enchantress. Truly, this will be appreciated by the young lass you honor.
Desire
February 27, 2008

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Oh My Word!!

Is there a form You have not tried yet
Holy Moly~~
Another one that Inspires the ink to spill and dedicated to a Precious Gem~
Love this!!

Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Voice~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
Eusebius
February 25, 2008

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bravo
A wonderful and lovely poem, dripping with the enchantment of the Celts...superb! Loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo...
Papagallo
February 24, 2008
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This is a beautful poem to the one that you love. A pleasure to read your work.
Faeryn
February 24, 2008

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I keep on reading this because it makes me smile. I'm going to print it out and stick on the wall above my desk. Thanks again, mommy
Poetry-and-rhyme
February 24, 2008

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princesss you done it again asa always no accpetions ur just the princess amera this is such a sweet poem
good lucks princesss
StarEyes
February 24, 2008

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This is beautiful! Almost as beautiful as Tay is and your wonderful heart! What a great dedication!! I love reading dedication poems, and this one has to be one of my favorites so far!

Best of luck in this contest!

and love

Nyetta
Ithica
February 24, 2008

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What a pretty little thing... A poets' prodigy, she is learning from the best! A very interesting form too, but it looks so complicated!
HaleyMary
February 24, 2008

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Beautiful write, Sis. Wonderful flow. I think Tay is very lucky to have you as part of her AP family. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
PerVirtuous
February 24, 2008

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You own this form. Great work and I absolutely love the subject matter. Three enthusiastic bunnies for this.
Faeryn
February 24, 2008
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Amera! this is so sweet! Thank you so very much, my wonderful Mommy. I love you. I really like this form too.
Love♥,
Tay
Pisces Pieces
February 24, 2008

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I love fairies And people who love fairies too

This is a warm and heartfelt recognition and I can feel the sincerity of your words. What struck me the most was the power of the last line of each stanza. There seemed to be such a strong, definitive statement made and when I read it, it just made me think 'and that's how it is' I hope you know what I mean because I don't really know how to explain it.

I hope to be able to check out Tay's writing soon ♥