I found his office, dark and grey
I needed answers, come what may
A saddened story to portray
His normal day
His normal day
I sat uneasy in my chair
His deadpan eyes refused to share,
the agonies of my despair
My soul to bare
My soul to bare
A poker face dismissed my frown
He asked if I was new to town
His cigarette had long burned down
His fingers brown
His fingers brown
Continuing my tale to tell,
That fatefull day she said farewell
Why did she leave for that hotel
My living hell
My living hell
Alluding to a hidden past
She promised me her love would last,
and swore that all would be surpassed
Our die was cast
Our die was cast
Then came that dreadful time in May,
A parting kiss, a wretched day…
A rival pimp, a bullett spray
And there she lay
And there she lay
The tabloids labelled them as whores,
dispensing sleaze from favoured floors
A trade in sex, the town ignores
Behind closed doors
Behind closed doors
But as I sat at home alone,
my nostrils filled with cheap cologne
Recalling whispers on the phone
Should I have known?
Should I have known?
For prostitutes are never free
And no-one listens to their plea
Abused by all, I guarantee
They cannot flee
They cannot flee
I had to know the real truth
Could she have danced for man and youth,
within a grubby mirrored booth ?
I need this sleuth
I need this sleuth
I paid in cash, he took the case
This expert of the human race
A specialist of such disgrace
The facts to trace
The facts to trace
And so this story ends today
My 'private eye' had much to say
The reason she was there that day
He would convey
He would convey
Her 'secret' past; a younger twin,
Coerced into a life of sin
Her vow? A new life to begin !
She could not win
She could not win
Too many girls are lead like sheep
A pimp's possessions, kill or keep
Whilst fathers fight and mothers weep
Is life so cheap?
Is life so cheap?
Author notes
For me, one of the best rhyming forms, the Monotetra.
Hope you enjoy
A contest entry
- For Rhymers Only!!!!!!! by Cupcrazy.
875 points, ended March 4, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wonderful
Brilliant ... great job mate... you are certainly developing a wonderful talent and taking it to new heights. Great work.
Bazza
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Excellent write, I particularly enjoyed the form. Hugs, Bunny
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Thanks
Thanks CC. I enjoyed the contest. There were some excellent pieces. Well judged
Thanks again
WD
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The theme used was very contemporary and well expressed. I like the resonating effect in each and every stanza rendered.
Excellent write
Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
HENSLEY
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Thanks
Thanks V. Appreciate your kind comments
Glad you enjoyed.
Thanks again.
WD
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I agree this is a wonderful rhyming form and one that you my friend have of to a tee. Makes me want to give it a try (on the sly on the sly) love everything about it Did i expect not to? Excellent always a joy to see your name on a piece Good luck in the contest
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Thanks
Hi L......
Hope you are well, my friend. This was another that hit 80 lines plus
Must learn to write more concisely
Always appreciate your kind comments. Monotetras tend not to do well in rhyming contests....... Ah well
Thanks again
Cheers
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80 line far to short my friend a great poem has no length.No matter the outcome of the contest circuit This reader knows the excellence of the posted work
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