I awake to the smell of lavender and honeysuckle
instantly I am alert that something is changed
I spring to my feet
and my knees don't pop or crack
my back isn't hurting
and for the first time in years
I have no pain in my head
yes something is changed
I reach for my glasses
but suddenly realize
I don't need them
my eyes are working just fine
perhaps I am dreaming
that's it, I am not even awake
I chuckle out loud
wait...
I just heard myself laugh
I must be awake
I open the blinds
and there before my very eyes
is the most astonishing sight
no longer is my yard where I left it the night before
but in it's place is now
the most beautiful garden filled with all my favorite things
flowers, plants, creatures and loved ones
and sitting right smack in the middle of them all
is none other than...
Jesus
Author notes
prompt - descrbe what happens when you die
( well I haven't died yet so this is the best I could do ... is how I imagine it ... lol )
A contest entry
- the suggestion box by grassisgreener.
600 points, ended March 10, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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you know what i really enjoyed this;
its so vivid and awesome...
i cant say much else im sorry but really this made me feel warm inside; especially at the end.. jesus. i ♥ jesus
thank you so much for sharing this !
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wow this is amazing and just wow how did you manage to imagine this? i hope you dont die for ages because my heart and myself would be sad
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boy i wish i could wake up and not have back pain without having to die first....
so, on a spiritual note, this is a solid piece. i think the language could use a little shot of creative juice, but the imagery here is strong, a sort of incredulous feel. it's actually an unintentional insight into society's belief that when we die, if there is an afterlife, it will be perfect and all our problems of the physical world will be alleviated. in that sense, i find this poem to be very revealing. thanks for entering!!! -
WOW!!! This is beyond words! I love how you describe this wonderful scene. For some reason, I find comfort in these words! This is amazing! I don't know if I can put into words the feelings that this one has left me with!!
Best of luck in this contest!!
Love you bunches and bunches
Nyetta
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