She's drawing in the water to wash her broken heart
Diseased by mental torture of which is just a part
Of what is deep inside her, a mass of living hell
Whilst kneeling by the ocean, she blackens that as well.
She's hidden in the shingle as dark as silted coal
Whilst crying in the debris she rinses out her soul
For this her retribution, is what she's waited for
The devil sits within her and blocks her every pore.
At last the tide is turning and she will be no more
New waters bathe the coastline and clean the dirty shore
Her voice for ever crying within a sea birds call
Where once had been a woman, there lives nothing at all.
Author notes
Photo by Jennifer ak Pantress at AP
A contest entry
- picture prompt --- use your imagination by pantress.
600 points, ended March 12, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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You paint a picture with words that bring your thoughts alive in the reader's mind, and we too can appreciate your world. The story line flows smoothly and sets the pace for this poem. The theme is maintained throughout the poem and the imagery is good. I read it several times and it gently came alive for me. Your feelings come through strong and straight from the heart.
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Different direction the photo led you
I like the way the sand got black
"Whilst kneeling by the ocean, she blackens that as well".
Thanks for your entry and best of luck in my contest. jennifer -
this is really good. your poems all have such a nice flow to them, i love reading them. you can tell you put a lot of thought into your writing.
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wow
ros what a vivid pic this paints very well written and with such deep emotion takes one to time and place goodluck in contest
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great a lovely input around the prop good luck xx
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That's really sad. I like it. Good luck in the contest.
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