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Light Of a New Day

And I’m letting go of a past that never let me choose
And I’m walking into the light of a brand new day
I’ll try to show you don’t have to fear to lose
Coz I love you too damn much to ever let you go

I’ve seen and heard so much in this life of mine
Had enough things happen, they left a pretty scar
But you, seem to wash away things that gave me pain
And I know, with you by my side I’ll always go far

You lifted me up, showed me what its like to love
And I understand you when you say you’re scared
I know coz I’ve felt the fear of loss, just like you
But you’ve given me hope more than I ever dared

And you have to know how much I love you
And you have to know things will be ok
You have to know I’ll never leave your side
We’re both walking into the light of a new day

I’m so proud of who you are, and everything you do
And I’m so lucky I get to call you my friend
I wanna let you know I’ll never let you go
I’ll be by your side until the very end

There’s so much love that now surrounds me
and I know that you’re the one that holds me tight
you’ve Given me things I never thought I deserved
and now everything in my life seems to be right

I can never say enough words of thanks
Or send enough prayers to the skies
No words could ever explain just what you mean
But for the rest of my life I swear I’ll try

Just to show you what you mean to me
And to prove its real, come what may
I love you, I’ll never let you go
Together we stand in the light of our new day

Author notes

hey guys, this is my first poem for a long long time.
I know its written as though its to one person, but its actually written to all my best friends, the most amazing people in my life who have gotten me through so much this year--- i love you all and i hope you know it!

also, I would just like to say thank you to my best friend brent, some of the lines in here are stolen from a song that he wrote me for my birthday!

hope you guys like it...dont be too harsh, ive been out of the game for a loooong time!
xo

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  • musik-freek
    March 17, 2008

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    Harsh?? Why would I be harsh if I love it!! Unlike the other 2 I read, this one has a message of hope in it, you're smiling while you write it. Last verse, definate favourite:
    Just to show you what you mean to me
    And to prove its real, come what may
    I love you, I’ll never let you go
    Together we stand in the light of our new day

    This is like a triumph. Like you've got to the top of the mountain just in time for sunrise. beautiful imagery! Just amazing!


    • Somebody-New
      March 17, 2008
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      thank you so much for your comment! i had tears in my eyes when i read it cos you truly just made me feel awesome about writing it, and seemed to understand the feelings i had and were trying to get across. i really appreciate your kind words so thank you so much!


  • Stoneface Gremlin
    March 3, 2008

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    I like the depth of this

    This is a very deep and emotional poem. It truly shows the feelings you have for your friends. There is such tenderness and caring in these lines.
    Even though I like the poem, I do have a couple problems. The flow seems a little cumbersome. That I might say is just my opinion.
    The second problem is the rhyme scheme you use in the first stanza doesn't match the following stanzas. In the first stanza, you rhyme the first and third lines. However, in the rest you rhyme the second and fourth lines.
    Still, it is a beautifully sentimental poem that shows the feelings of a truly caring person.

    • Somebody-New
      March 16, 2008
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      hey, thank so much for taking the time to comment! i really appreciate it, your words and praise were so heartfelt so thank you!
      i get what you're saying about the rhyme and flow, i was going to go back and do a bit of editing to make it sound better but i decided to leave it as it was as a first draft cos that way its completely my own thoughts/feelings, if you know what i mean.

      thank you once again for your comment! keep well xo

  • Time focus on Me
    February 24, 2008

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    Hi, Ebs

    There’s so much love that now surrounds me
    and I know that you’re the one that holds me tight
    you’ve Given me things I never thought I deserved
    and now everything in my life seems to be right

    I can never say enough words of thanks
    Or send enough prayers to the skies
    No words could ever explain just what you mean
    But for the rest of my life I swear I’ll try

    Just to show you what you mean to me
    And to prove its real, come what may
    I love you, I’ll never let you go
    Together we stand in the light of our new day

    You have done a wonderful and marvelous job with this poem. loved the way it was written and well expressed through out this poem. u placed your heart and soul into this poem and its beautiful. Way to go bravo job. keep up the beautiful work. I enjoy reading your poems they are amazin. Way to go with this. how are u doing? Hope all is well. sorry I havent bein by in a while i bein busy wit this last class for graduation. great poem this is and showin u some love on ya page. marvelous well written words.

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