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Sunday: A day for Newspapers, Glossy Magazines and Oxygen

 

 

 



I love Sunday papers.
Even back when they were broadsheets,
tying yourself up in some kind
of terrible yoga position
trying to read them.

Delightful house-beautiful pages
that make you squirm with envy.
Pictures of fancy food, all laden with more
than a thousand calories.

And gardening tips,
which really piss me off!

I don't have a one as such

- just a small walled-in space filled

to the brim with pots and plants.

"The Mail" gave away a free DVD of My Left Foot,
starring Daniel Day Lewis and Brenda Fricker.
- A long way from collecting Green Shield stamps,

saving up for a toaster you didn't really want or need.
Childhood memory interlude of my mum
licking wads of the stamps and sticking
them on her face, saying she was a prize.

Rick started on home oxygen this weekend.

It's a scary time for all of us.

He feels trapped inside a wheel,

a hamster-like existence with nowhere to run to.

Shortness of breaths carrying long tubes,

lace curtains that flap inside an empty cavity.



I said to him:
"watch the film, remind yourself
 of other's pain and difficulties."

Christy Brown painted and wrote

by using only his left foot,

such an accomplishment for anyone.
Rick heaved heavy sighs and nodded

- in slow motion agreement.

  We both understood about turning corners.

   And inevitable Mondays.

 

 

 

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  • zochit2me gold member
    March 1, 2008
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    Ahhhhh Sunday...

    A day to just breath.

    Becky


  • billyd1012
    February 28, 2008

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    I see kids in wonder with what might be of this world, quickly to the gimme, gimme---three toasters are better than one because I need to say a nickel instead of a penny. From knowing your neighbor to if your sick, you suck. Whenever I come here, I just think I need to try harder.


  • DogFish silver member
    February 27, 2008

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    I'm usually rather parsimonious with my "clappys", CHilly": if I like a poem I give it a clap, seldom more. Often an excellent poem is some soul spilling out feelings from a deep chasm in thier life; I don't have the heart to offer "three cheers" when someone is betwixt the Devil and the deep blue sea.
    But I really enjoyed this poem...


  • Heart Sutra
    February 27, 2008
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    Ah, yes, I feel you here Gill.

    Excellent poem....


  • redmarkonthewall
    February 24, 2008

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    Sad. Truly a painful situation.
    I said to him:
    "watch the film, remind yourself
    of other's pain and difficulties."
    Intruiging. We often focus a lot on our own pain. If we focus on others then we can see that maybe others need more help than us and that if we help them they in turn will help us.
    Thank you for this amazing write.


  • misselaineous
    February 24, 2008

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    i read this this morning an left a comment about green shield stamps and how i can envisage your garden as i have stood there in the dark dank autumn air - a paradise of oasis and how the times is as tall as you my pocket venus, and how i wish you and rick well, and its isn't here!!

    its sorta up there above what i said the first time

    it was good the first time i came to read and better the second
    will be back for more morsels

    elaine


    • NurseChilly gold member
      February 25, 2008
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      Ahhhh ... next time you come over, hopefully it will be warm enough to sit outside and sink a few gin and tonics to the warming skies

      thank you Elaine ....

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    February 24, 2008

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    The poetess portrays Sunday with an array of emotions and imagery that make the reader smile at first with the contortions needed to read the broadsheets,nudges nostalgia by showing us her Mam with Green Shield stamps stuck to face saying she's a prize and tugs the heart a little and the heart smiles at the memory of those halcyon days of plastic picnic sets and other gifts that were collected with glee for they were a bonus for the working class and oh the excitement of finally filling enough books. Then the grand slam, the reality of Rick trying to breath easily and his being told to focus on the fate, the feat and the left foot of Christy Brown and the reader can feel his empathy but also the incredible ache to simply not feel the weight of grasp-gasping oxygen as " he heaved heavy sighs and nodded in slow motion agreement" The poetess writes without any pretenciousness, she neither dresses the day up nor down, she says these are the facets found here and the reader is left flabbergasted, this is poetry about real people for people to find what's real, what matters and to marry all the momentous moments and minute details into a Sunday that makes the heart sigh. Kudos.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      February 24, 2008
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      wow Yvette... you sleigh me... truly

      I am honoured to find such words of encouragement from you, thank you so much

  • Suzanne Dia
    February 24, 2008

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    You had to make me cry, yeah?



    Don't stop these.

  • grm
    February 24, 2008

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    few can find poetry in the grimmest of situations as you do, Gilly.

    sadly outstanding...even when standing on one foot, waiting for the other shoe to drop

    • NurseChilly gold member
      February 24, 2008
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      thank you Guy.... so much

      I hope that Nicci is okay too... sad news for her

  • Rowan gold member
    February 24, 2008

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    That first stanza had me giggling-yes, yoga-like reading.
    The last lines made me think, how much I take for granted, a nice soft slap.
    I love when I can tuck myself inside a poem, your a master at bringing things to life, honestly, and with believable starkness.


  • Wandika gold member
    February 24, 2008

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    A little different chapter

    But still filled with such imagery as only you can write from what I have seen on this site.

    I remember the newspaper with the comics and news. Now most seem to be a rag good only for fish & chips.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      February 24, 2008
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      You're not far wrong there Jim ... but we do have good fish and chips up here...


  • Namita
    February 24, 2008

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    You are on a roll! Your images are worth millions... those things jhave life, Gill!! Beautiful... "heaved heavy sighs" - lovely! Keep writing- I love these ones, exceptional writer (EW is what I'll call you lol)

    - namita


  • layla.
    February 24, 2008

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    a hamster-like existance>a hamster-like existence? typo!


    i LOVED the ending, the "heaved heavy sighs" was wonderful. you are so good with details, i always tell you that. there is so much to learn from you. love this, absolutely. [yes, i know the spellcheck sucks. be happy you have evil sisters as an alternative]


  • alaskanamber
    February 24, 2008

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    A rather random write but all tied together in the last line. An enviable skill, organized chaos. Good luck in the contest. I enjoyed this

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