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Gates of moist dirt

Eat through the other side
grind the flesh of my chest
slurp and swallow my torso
till hollowed and empty

Feast on newly red blood
fresh out of the veins
lick the crevices of bones
till all marrow is devoured

Nibble on my spine
till I go paralyzed
Beat on  my mind
Till I become vandalized

Feed me pain

till I become tantilized

 

Your face covered in my being

You take over my spirit

My body a deserted vessel

nothing left worth keeping

 

Toss me out

Relieve me of this misery

end me

and all I have left 

 

Nothing

 

I'm begging you

 

Slip me under the gates

of moist earth

Crawling with welcoming

Darkness

 

Close my memory's with one last

 

 

Kiss 

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  • j-ay rose
    March 31, 2008

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    ewwww sounds kind of violent and sad at the same time. it is pretty interesting though. thank you for entering my contest. (:


  • Flight of Dragons
    March 3, 2008

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    Whoa intense!!!! Good poem thick with imagry unrivaled. SO SO SO good. The end just blasts you away. Great job!


  • motel silver member
    February 29, 2008

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    love the twists and turns....excellent ending. the structure is well thought out...the last line is the best. thanks.


  • Grimoire
    February 24, 2008

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    Worms. The kiss of a worm? Thats what I get from it. There are some decent wordings, and beyond that I don't see the depth, or deeper meaning.


    • bones7
      February 24, 2008
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      It is metaphors.
      I guess not everyone is meant to see the depth of this poem.
      Thank you for your comment


  • ConvenientExcuses
    February 24, 2008

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    I really love the ending. Your piece had me gripped right until the very end. It takes a lot of talent to keep a reader intrigued all the way through a poem, especially a longer one. Great job. Keep writing, you're definitely good at at it.


  • RyanosaurusWrecks
    February 24, 2008

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    memory, memories....
    WHAT???
    an attack on your very fibers, well written and equally disgusting
    I might put this on a card and give it to my girlfriend
    for easter


    • bones7
      February 24, 2008
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      Yes She might think your a sweet and sincere guy if you gave this to her for easter.lmao


  • N e a r
    February 24, 2008

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    This is definitely one of your better writes.
    This draws out so much emotion and it just weighs so heavily, especially when the end comes up. "one last kiss" ~ that really stuns me.
    Just wow.
    Awesome job, man.


  • Ryno
    February 24, 2008

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    Brilliant! You are a poetical Einstien!!!!!!!
    It is so dark and utterly disturbing it sends chills up my spins, but the idea behind it is ingenious.

    I loved the building tension; the last line connected every once of the poem and it really made the piece finish on a strong point.

    This is a skillfull; how our bodies are completely infactuated with love/lust... how we feel like nothing were so taken over... like we don't even control ourselves anymore.

    Wonderful! Good luck in the contest!

    Ryan

    • bones7
      February 24, 2008
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      Thank you.
      I appreciate that comment alot.
      This is one of my favorites of my own,So I'm glad you like it as well!.
      Thanks.


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    February 24, 2008
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    Such unusual imagery. I like it.

    Be Well
    Mark


  • adios muchachos gold member
    February 24, 2008
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    Brant

    Chilling! Very macabre!


  • storiesuntold gold member
    February 24, 2008
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    My goodness what a write

    You have penned this one with such excellence and it captured me the whole way through Bravo


  • Neha Kaushik
    February 24, 2008

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    Beautiful man!!
    this is a great work.. your imagery is worth appreciating and the last lines are simply amazing.. thanks for sharing..


  • The Chameleon
    February 24, 2008

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    Very Nice

    I think that this would have won the contest my friend. You always impress me with your works. I think that you have come a long way since I first chatted with ya. This poem is completely raw and very excellent.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    February 24, 2008

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    Interesting work here.
    I love your imagery and creativity
    in this one. Well done Brant and
    keep it up my friend!




    Jeremy0826

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