To live again and love again
leave behind the hungry years,
that miserable ‘cyclopedia
damp, with solitary tears.
Clutched once more in younger arms
the distance in our years I’ve found
I’m softer now no longer bound,
a new me has arisen
from a prison.
Looking back at how I’d cared
with loving heart unbidden,
much poverty of love was shared
a dozen years forbidden.
Living in my battledress, my chastity,
I hoped, prayed, no one would see,
my fall from grace, the hate the sins,
my worthless world laced within
jealousies too long embraced.
The bitter lies and broken vow
exposed as feminine whims.
But that’s all over now
Puffed with certain Savoir faire
I know is hidden here somewhere
I stretch and bend submission,
to body beautiful transition.
Nothing can arise to stem my sighs
I can’t go back to where I’ve been,
a tortured past begat the dream,
a youthfulness is on the rise,
I’m positively steaming,
my life has meaning again.
Tough though knowing,
it took death to heal that pain.
Author notes
By Ronnica.
Please tell me what you think
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9pts...
Thank you for your contribution to The Poetic Bandits Reading list
~Lilac
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Loved the various structures of the stanzas and the great rhyming in throughout...very well written with a nice ending too.Good luck
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Wow, an excellent write! I noticed the first line is off center, just to let you know, but besides that, this poem is beautiful! Great work, thanks for sharing!
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Wow! This is such an excellent write! I love the talent flowing from you. I love the hope that it gives in the end, after all the pain that there was~
So beautifully done~
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I've already commented on this, but the re-reading of this poem just adds to it's dimension. It's really good Ronni.
alby
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A really great poem about the rebirth of oneself. Quite inspiring with very decorative language. Your rhyme scheme went a little off-track in the fourth stanza but I still loved how much emotion you portrayed in your words. Awesome job. Thank you for sharing this with the group.
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A really wonderful piece you have written here. Very deep with reflection of the past and up to the present of new beginnings. Great rhyme and assonance.
Love & Light
Debbera
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This is a wonderful poem... I really like the simple, conversational language that you have used to create a tone of confiding in someone... strength shines through these words brilliantly
Keep writing
Polly -
It can take a real sort of courage to rise again from a shameful or tragic past. You've done very well in describing the emotion involved in pleasantly even rhyme and meter. It can be hard to shed the old, even when it means a new beginning.
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You went thorugh phases of life and death my friend and you eloved the best part of you in my mind with this piece.
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Good interpretation of this title prompt in this contest. Liked the flow, the use of space and the sentiments you express so well in these lines. Good rhythm, rhyme as well.
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Very intense and filled with your emotions. I feel the bitter sadness and yet the renewal of strength through death. The spell check will most likely not catch the poetic abbreviation of "encyclopedia". I do believe that you were going for "'cyclopedia" instead of "'cyclopaedia". Looks like a minor typo. You poured your heart and soul into this and it is very evident. I noticed the changing rhyme scheme and I more or less put that aside. I read with my heart and didn't think of form. Thank you for entering into the contest and best wishes for you. I hope you will make that spelling fix. Joyce
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Wow! This sounds like a very personal story. You have written the feelings with a sense of raw honesty which imparts a refreshing feeling.
My critique would be on the rhyme. You have obviously changed the sequence knowingly, but I feel it would read better if it was more consistant. The main obsticle being the eighth line ending in "prison."
Other than that I thought is was a marvellous write of self renewal.
alby
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