Feelings of a foul mouth,
never uttering words.
Fear rises from ashes
clogging windpipe's flow.
Pitch forecasts rise reaping,
into peach sparkled hues.
Sandy seas shift in shame;
dragonflies scatter skies.
Tracing tears through nightmares;
tore tongues taste nothingness,
hollow hymns ring deaf ears,
traveling time; sinking
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this is a very unique poem, one that somehow relates a little to my Death In Winter poem. but you did an excellent job on it. keep up the good work. look forward to your next writings.
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This was so painful to read with the already heart wrenching moments im experiencing. This is such a wonderful write. This really moved me deeply...
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This is painful, so much so that it is painful to the reader to read about their pain
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Whoa..that was pain alright...
you really know what words to use to describe the
agony of pain...cleverly done with imagery and similie's
too! that horrible sinking feeling...snapped me out
of it real quick!
ears/Seattle what a write!
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you really blew me away with this dark write...wow! so excellent! blessings always~ Trisha
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Perfect For the Tormented Soul
Wow i really ......really enjoyed this.......i have alot of writes along these lines..but i keep them to myself......this one struck me......im glad you commented on mine or i would of never seen it .......Thank you.... I love it
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A writhing portrayal of hurt and anguish... Sometimes our acts come back too haunt us, and I'm sorry may be a bit too late...
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This is another great write, I got chills while reading this not sure if it was the pic, the cool air from the fan or the words, but I can assure you there were no chills before I began to read the words. this is a marvelious write !!!!
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Wonderful
Very powerful creation. So well created and expressed. Thank you for sharing.
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wow
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"Tracing tears through nightmares": So true.
I have had many nightmares where I wake up crying.
This is very well written.
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Wow Timothy this was quite a eye opening. What wonderful imagery you have penned. Jeepers Creepers!!!!! I can relate to these lines being in my church choir.
I think this guy sits behind me..... 
tore tongues taste nothingness,
hollow hymns ring deaf ears,
traveling time; sinking
You are very talented and your vocab is terrific. You take care and thank you for sharing. Excellent write. Sandy
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"Pitch forecasts rise reaping" That is rather striking in my opinion. I really love this piece. A marvelous poem that impresses the emotions you felt. Kudos to you!
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You don't write in the dark genre often but when you do, you blow the reader away. The well chosen vocabulary really adds depth to this poem. Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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Wow...
I love this poem. It's dark and I can feel the hurt and anger that is portrayed here. Awesome write uncle!
Love,
Hidden Fortress
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Tim, this is so unlike you. I read such angst through your well chosen words. Hope you are alright! As for the write, your alliteration is superb. I suffer nightly from nightmares, that won't go away. It sets the mood for the day, and forcing a smile, I know I have to work and go on.Nedd a shoulder? Mine are wide and strong.
Shana
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Sounds like you have your dark days too! Poetry is such a great way to release this... I hope all is well and that this write gave you some relief?
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aw, i love the poem
but i hope you are ok i love you
and im here alwats hope you have a good day
with all my love..xoxox
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Cheer up my brother walk in the sunshine!
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Sad Feel
A terrible place to be in for sure my friend. Come into the sunshine and enjoy its warmth.
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my dearest and most precious being this write sent tears along with shivers of worried angst along my spine. I love you my darling brother and if I could take away EVERY moment of dismality and disdain from your spirit and reilluminate it I would in a milliheartbeat. superbly written from your painful pen xx love you bunches and more. many loving blessings always xxxxxx
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This is a very different side of your pen than I have seen... Very intriguing. Dark, and in a beautifully dimsal - if that can even be. A lot of great phrasing here. Well penned!!
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Well written
Hope all is well
Your bro,
Mark
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