I'm down for the count
[I get a lot of shock]
Another piece of paper
[No alibi, I'm caught]
He's got the back lights flashin
[This road's a dead end]
Another damn ticket
[A fight with my old man]
Damn, I keep breathing
[Maybe he'll leave]
A knock on the window
[Ten places I'd rather be]
I give him a smile
[Keep the window shut]
Wow, he looks crabby
[He needs a donut]
I laugh at the thought
[He gives me a glare]
Points at the window
[I only just stare]
Now he's irratated
[Like he wasn't before?]
"Get out of the car!"
["Open up the damn door!"]
Damn, stop yelling
[I can hear you just fine]
Just give me my ticket
[So we can both live our lives]
"You smeel like beer"
[You smell like ass]
How much you been drinkin
[More than you have]
"How old are you?"
[My fake ID says 21]
"Who's care is this?"
[Some guy named Jon]
"Can you walk a straight line?"
[I'd rather not]
"Can you touch your nose?"
[I'll give it a shot]
"Say the alphabet backwards"
[Uhh, C, O, P?]
"You being a smartass?
[Would you like me to be?]
"Get in the car"
[Yours or mine?]
"I'm taking you to the station"
[Stupid straight line]
"Who're your parents"
[Jeff and that hoe]
"That makes no sense"
[Damn straight it don't]
"Can you hold up this sign?"
[There's a lot of numbers, damn]
"Look up just once"
[Blinded by the camera flash]
Author notes
Aha, that was slightly fun for me to write.
Option 3: Camera Flash
umm, the ending might not make sense, but you know when you go the police station and you have to hold up the sign so they can take pictures? Well, you probably don't personally (i don't either), but yah. That's what was happening, lol.
A contest entry
- Because we're not sick of options yet. by Viva La Vie Boheme.
600 points, ended March 25, 2008, 17 entries
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basically, i loved this.
i would love to give you a constructive, helpful comment, but i'm too busy laughing my ass off for that.
thanks, you made my night.
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Okay, I know this may be a bit of an annoying comment, but "he needs a donut" came on exactly when The Simpsons started, and I couldn't help but laugh.
Wow, this was a very original entry! Seriously, it was fun to read. I loved it, I really did! Thanks for entering!
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ahahaha, i was watching the simpsons when i thought of that line! thanks, i'm glad you enjoyed it.
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I like this!
There's a lot of originality to it... something that seems rather rare nowadays.
It made me chuckle, which was nice, though I know that the subject is a rather serious one.
The second to last stanza was my favourite for some reason ([Stupid straight line]) Very clever.
Anyway, best of luck in the contest!
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