whispered secrets
two species;
sheltering
wings
one
heart and soul;
02/23/2003
A contest entry
- Earth Angel # 1 by Lavender Butterfly.
390 points, ended February 25, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Dearest Poetess, I cannot write a concise write with impact as yet ( maybe never! ) , am still striving to hone to the bare bone, but you achieve it. The picture for me is unnecessary and I always scroll down to concentrate on the words and disregard a picture posted with poetry, it is like viewing the TV with subtitles for me, but that is honesty and not a criticism. I concentrated on the piece for a while to learn from it and offer a true appraisal, for me, the excitement was being able to remove the visual aid and then pare ten words , a feat in itself, to nine, for possibly the word " wings" may not necessarily be necessary, as always, a rambling perspective, the punctuation chosen after the end word is confusing somewhat but that is being pedantic! Regardless, you reach your reader and the closeness of two as one is felt, so job done!
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Yvette, thank you so much for that most valued critique, but let me first say "do not cut yourself short on your accomplishments" . I do agree wholeheartedly that a picture can be like looking at the scroll on the bottom of a tv set....but there are those times that I personally choose an illustration [as I am one of those people that has said all my life"sometimes I feel as if I can crawl right inside of a picture and remain there"] I do know though that in poetry it should be the words alone that carry the impact, but being that we are given the chance here to illustrate at times I can't seem to jump over that shadow of mine
. It is like having too many choices in a market and I will get more than really needed 
. In this case however I used the picture because it was the prompt and I guess I wanted the reader to SEE what it was that inspired me. I will give consideration to eliminate the word "wings". Once again...that word has a personal thing for me...as I am owned by two parrots [a huge Macaw and a Timneh African Grey. They always bring me solace and serenity...and I often say "in the shelter of their wings I find myself". Funny how our own lives influence that of which we write at times [without as really being aware of it] I just noticed that now.....and I guess the picture subconciencely reminded me of the bond between self and my birds......and at times I admit to also getting sucked in by that right brain, left brain thing fighting each other.
Your comment is soooooo appreciated , because I honestly feel it comes from one of the best poetesses on this site<-------not empty words, but quite honestly my opinion.
may you have a great Easter if you celebrate it....if not, may you just have a great day,
much love and warm thoughts,
reenie
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Oh My!!
This is a Beauty and what a picture You painted with Your words
Love the emotions-connection for that can be felt within eaqch line~
Love this!!
Swells the eyes
Can't help but shed tears
Wooooooooo Hooooooooo
Keep that quill dancing~~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Bonded for life
Taarna, the last of the Taarakians, shared a bond with her avain mount like this; they were inseparable, loyal unto death. -Very nice mon Cheri
-Darmok
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merci bien cheri....for stopping by and commenting , as well as for the accompanying little bit of trivia. Will see if I can't find a bit more about that story [am completely un-aware of that which you speak] but I know I will love what I read]
zzzzz
reenie
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Love becomes a helix and a dance when we allow ourselves to be vulnerable enough to be one in its light.
Love, Tom B,
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thanks my friend......everything is about allowing ourselves to be vulnerable. Well, I think we all are.....but it is in the admittance that we are that we can make progress....for to go on as if we have been left untouched does take the rhythm out of the dance. I always so love your words of wisdom, be it in a comment or in a write, thank you always
much love
xoxoxoxoxo
reenie
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yes xx
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thank you P.P for stopping by as well as for the applause. You are always so kind to me
much love my friend
xoxoxoxoxoxo
reenie
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thank you reenie xx
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Just beautiful,... x
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thank you so much. I am humbled and flattered
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reenie
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Lovely in everyway as beauty and heart pour onto the pages in sweet words!
I wish you all the best in the contest!
Linda
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Linda, thanks sweetie. I am so sorry for being in touch so little........but AP is sort of on the back burner of my life at present. Temporary insanity is currently reigning with an iron fist and that usually makes my Muse take an LOA...
much love
xoxoxoxoxo
reenie
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wow this format is very efective
great job...
i loved this
best of luck in the contest
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thank you kat. I much appreciate your kind comment,
reenie
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Excellent!
So beautiful are the words you weave from your precious soul. Much love and light, and thanks for sharing. Peace sis.
-Timothy
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