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When you call me baby

I'm a simple girl, it's true.
My tastes are not extravagant,
my thoughts somewhat naive.
We live in a small town
and there's a million places
that we'll never see.
There are adventures to be had,
and risks to be taken.
But I know where you are
is where I should be,
every time you call me...

baby




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"I have Poetic Grace"

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  • Angelflower
    March 28, 2008

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    This was just so sweet.. The love and hope in this was great..
    It was just so beautiful..
    I enjoyed it so much..
    Great write.
    Peace to you, Jetleena


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    March 28, 2008

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    you sound like the richest girl in the world too!

    Smart poetess you truly are!
    Lovely and so wise, thankyou for your heartfelt entry!
    I really enjoyed your lovely poem!
    ears/Seattle. thankyou for your entry!


    • marciakay81
      April 11, 2008
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      thank you for the honorable mention. have a great weekend!


  • Melissa Burns
    March 21, 2008
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    awwwwwww this is sugar and sweetness, but in a nice way I liked it ecspecially the lines

    We live in a small town
    and there's a million places
    that we'll never see.

    I lived in a town with my hubbie and then got preg - we were a population boom lol, the town had 298 ppl


  • takemypainaway
    March 11, 2008

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    I think that noone ever feels worthy of true love

    i know i dont thats for sure

    but it looks like youve got you heart in the right

    place...

    thank you for entering!!

    **kat


  • Blooming Poet
    March 6, 2008

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    All of our thought are naive at one point, admitting it is very grown up of you. I love how you shaped this poem into such a beautiful ending. That turned a self poem into a love poem. Great work


  • scream.n2.nite
    March 4, 2008

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    Lasting

    Oh Yay!!! I loved this lil' sweet write!! It has so much thought and meaning... there were a few errors with mechanics but they'd be easy to fix!!

    " My taste(s) are not extravagant,"

    and then Maybe: "and risk(should this be a plural as well??) to be taken."

    Besides that the poem is wonderful!! It's one of my favorite for sure!! Thank you so much for entering my contest!! This poem made me smile. ^_^

    - - riah - -


  • ForeverNightMusic
    February 28, 2008
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    i like this poem ... but it has nothing to do with rain

  • Jokerman
    February 27, 2008

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    sweet and simple and beautiful

    love this little piece .last four lines especially.doesn't matter where you are if you're with the one you love.


  • Blooming Poet
    February 25, 2008
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    wow. short and powerful and sweet

  • fanniesson
    February 24, 2008
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    Love the ending
    another great sum up of love from you
    enjoyed the read


    • marciakay81
      February 26, 2008
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      thanks for your comments...they mean alot coming from you. i'm a fan of your writing.


  • dreamweaver08
    February 24, 2008

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    thanks for your inspiring words, they really help and congrats on finding someone, i know that sooner or later i will have that too.
    god bless
    -writerofpoetry8

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