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Thousand flakes falling,

  Fall softly over the land,

    Water in my hand.

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  • Peteskid gold member
    October 29, 2008

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    very nice... setting and imagery done very well,
    and within the miracle of a snowflake ... another miraculous thing...PK


  • individuality gold member
    July 30, 2008

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    a good poem penned, ah yes we can catch the sky at times as it softly slips to earth and melts, the wonder of nature.


  • RedAquarius
    May 28, 2008

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    I like the imagery you want to portray here, I'm not sure I would lead from falling to fall, maybe something like "drape" if you changed fall? I really like the final line, the flake changing form when it meets warmth.