In blackest night with icy stars,
A sickle moon and red-eyed Mars,
Such beauty is the desert land
That I forget the sun that scars.
I marvel at the vista grand,
The silhouette of cactus stand,
The effervescent sun bright skies,
The broad expanse of hot, sere sand.
I contemplate those days by-gone
When mustang ran and doe and fawn
Found shade beneath the mesquite tree
And drank the dew in pastel dawn.
I ponder at the beauty found
At miles of sand, saguaro gowned,
and stand in awe at what I know
that to this land my soul is bound.
I love this desert, hot and dry,
Quixotic quail, coyote cry,
And glow of brilliant sunlit sky,
And glow of brilliant sunlit sky.
Author notes
Frost's poem has 16 lines. To compensate for the disparity of 16 to 20 I have added a quatrain.
http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/4164-Robert-Frost-Stopping-By-Woods-On-A-Snowy-Evening
A contest entry
- Robert Frost-based Contest for Allpoetry, Winklings & Friends #51 by Lyndon.
2590 points, ended March 14, 2008, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I enjoyed reading this :) this is the kind of poem I really like. And one of the best things I like about the desert is a star filled night in the open desert. The wonder that creeps in is superb :)
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Hi
I really enjoyed this. The imagery is fab.
I especially liked the lines:
'In blackest night with icy stars'
'And drank the dew in pastel dawn'
'At miles of sand, saguaro gowned'
These really take me to the moment.
Wonderful!
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Very lovely write. the form and the flow, great, and the topic, one that would make anyone sigh.
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This is a reasonable poem
Stanzas one and two followed the rhyme scheme that Frost had locked himself into. Then you preserved the rhyme pattern but not the continuity.
You have aaba bbcb dded ffgf gggg whereas the Frostian pattern for you would be:
aaba bbcb ccdc dded eeee.
Your poem otherwise is a fine effort. Not truly Frostian, but very good.
Although of the desert biome, this poem is a wonderful celebration of nature. The desert theme comes through forcefully in your repeated line.
Frost's poem is world famous because of the openness of interpretation to the metaphorical implications of it. One cannot quite do that with your poem. However, Frost is Frost! No doubt about that.
Strands come through of love of the land; wistfulness for animals once there; enchantment in colors; landscape and soul.
Thank you, poet, for this poem.
Lyndon of the Winklings.
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Quite the imagery ...
and your poem flows with a nice touch! It's not often that we read of the desert and yet, having been there, I do believe that you have related it well. Keep on writing with that Western slant that must be outside your door, it's a nice change! joy
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very nice
I enjoyed reading this -
...and drank the dew in pastel dawn. I loved that line.
Beautifully orchestrated to Frost's famous poem. I enjoyed this so much. Best of luck in this contest. A great write. ~Pamela
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Ah, I read to the end, and that repeating line...I said, "That sounds familiar!" and now I see it's in the style of Frost...so now I know where I saw it....either that or I'm just imagining it all right now, don't laugh, I tend to do that.
But it's a beautiful poem, relaxing, contemplative.
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Thank you for your comment. The original had that flow and serenity. I hope my poem captured that. I am glad you liked it.
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