if we stood side by side
could you ever tell
that all my hate came from you
if we stood across the street
could you ever tell
that im fed up with your voice
if we stood across county lines
could you ever tell
i want you gone forever
if we stood across state lines
could you ever tell
thats where you stayed to hide
if we stood oceans apart
could you ever tell
that he is only one keeping me coming back
if we stood side by side
could you ever tell
that all i want is rightfully mine
if we stood across the street
could you ever tell
all i want is for you to reach for me
if we stood across county lines
could you ever tell
that all i want is for you to walk the distance
if we stood across state lines
could you ever tell
that you made the biggest mistake
if we stood oceans apart
could you ever tell
that im better off
and always have been
and always will be...
A contest entry
- Giving up, Finding hope, Give it all! by darkhawk.
450 points, ended March 2, 2008, 13 entries
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Comments
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u make ur point clearly i like this poem
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hey
nice poem alot of emotion it has a meaning to it that people can relate to it isnt just words its words with meaning the flow was otay and the repeater fit in well but i got a question on one of the lines
that he is only one keeping me coming back
i believe a word is missing from this line -
What I think itz that it's AWESOME. Let me take a wild guess who this is about. Lol. Loads of emotion. Waz going on wit cha?? But I like how you repeated could you ever tell. =] Great Job. <3 Ily Babes <3
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