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it's Saturday, the Sabbath, Time for Remembrance



Sandra used to bring bagels and smoked salmon for breakfast.
Me, the smoked bacon
from Bob's cheese and bacon stall

of Ashton Market; the best pig around.
Maggie would bring a huge tub of cream cheese.

We'd feast
then chat:
solve crosswords
discuss the meaning of,

everything
anything

things like:
In Vitro Fertilisation and morals
the age of consent and abortions
sunday football
the pope

men

women
sex
reggae music and Billy's jamaican bread.

Weekends were for cleaning duties
in the operating rooms.
Waiting for the odd emergency
to happen,

three staff per shift
the Jewess
the half-n-half Catholic
and the Methodist.

And yes, Sandra did eat the bacon.

Spoke to her recently,
she's the head nurse
of a suite of theatres in Bolton Royal Hospital.

Maggie retired,

cares for her husband Steadroy.
He used to make me ganja tea when I was sick -
an old fashioned Antiguan man,

with a soft voice and snake hips.
Boy O' boy:

I tell Maggie how lucky she is
to have a man like Stead
he has perfect rhythm.

Reminds me to go visit them soon.

 

Rise towards Sunday.

 

 

 

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  • just rob gold member
    March 11, 2008

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    Rarely

    have I seen a title, and a last line, that framed a poem so perfectly. This feeds all six senses, with tantalizing snippets of wholesomeness. Nice to read of such, to celebrate things more sacred than mere prayers in less-than-divine churches.

    Congrats on a righly deserved gold.


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    February 28, 2008

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    A really nice memoir...one of the best things about this genre is the candid view of others lives and experiences.
    One of the reasons I keep coming back here.


  • girl shaman
    February 26, 2008

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    i could probably say the same thing as many people have told you; your talented & very gifted in poetry & my god you can really conjure up some specific emotions.
    but i just simply want to say i definatly see why you are first in the finalists.
    congrats

  • Nicole Hanna
    February 23, 2008

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    I think I might read this a few times every day just to remind me how much work I need to do to even come close. Friendly competition is good for the soul


  • onerios13
    February 23, 2008

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    He used to make me ganja tea when I was sick -
    an old fashioned Antiguan man,

    with a soft voice and snake hips.

    Nik had told me to check this out...and I have to admit, this is beautifully blended, the type of poetry that touches you emotionally between the lines. No fat on this bacon, m'pet.

    Just lovely, Miz Chilly.


  • Namita
    February 23, 2008

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    You transform something so usual to something extraordinary, special, beautiful and poetic. Your imagery is just beyond words. Perfect scenes form in my mind.

    You are a marvellous writer, Gilly.

    - namita

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    February 23, 2008

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    I always love the feel of your pieces, they are so full bodied.

    And I read your second stanza and I miss the close friendships, the ones that unfortunately changed because of time, distance and life.

    This is excellent.

  • Suzanne Dia
    February 23, 2008

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    I really really like this, Gill, you should do a book of poetic memoirs. I love the way you write your memories. The nostalgia is more than pleasant, and it withstands time ..





  • Nicole Hanna
    February 23, 2008
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    Hell yes. This is what I'm talking about! Into the finalist it goes. Hopefully, others will read this and see what I'm looking for before entering


    • NurseChilly gold member
      February 23, 2008
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      golly

      • Nicole Hanna
        February 23, 2008
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        lol Don't act surprised. You're the shizzle.

        Isn't that what kids these days are saying? lol.


        • NurseChilly gold member
          February 23, 2008
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          i get... You're Bad!!! as in Good.. it's all very confusing.. and I'm so glad I'm not 15 any more..

          but Thank you

          • Nicole Hanna
            February 23, 2008
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            You and me both. I get indigestion just thinking about my teens.


  • DogFish silver member
    February 23, 2008
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    Ordinary moments can have extraordinary meaning...


  • ca ne fait rien
    February 23, 2008

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    This was so full of colour and smells and tastes and even the metallic clink of cleaning the instruments (nodouble meaning intended- at least I don't think so). It just b tumbles with life and warmth.

    • NurseChilly gold member
      February 23, 2008
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      heheheheh.... i love your double entendre...

      thankie Stef

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