So young and tender was this teenager
pregnant with a baby of her lover
To escape the claustrophobic clutches
of her father and her mother
A perfect reason to leave her family
and create a love cradle for her child
They would have no power to deny her
or tame the passion that was wild
Her baby was the god-given answer
and it would keep her with her only love
This precious life that grew within her womb
inner salvation from above
So naive, she noticed her blood spotting
and it drained out from her all faith and hope
for she believed the life within was gone
and without blinking tied a rope
If only she knew that blood was normal
as she clutched her last letter to her breast
but her final message was wrought with pain
and she left it stapled to her chest
Please tell me what you think
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Sad
This has become a sad world when we give up on our children and let them become adults before their time. Sadly teenage pregnancy is an excepted thing today and we wonder why the worlds cries out as we become our own gids. Dark and sad poet.
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This was such a deep, emotional poem. It made me want to cry.. just because I know that sometimes some people don't know better and this could really happen. Thanks for sharing such a beautiful write. Best of luck
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Wow... This was so sad. Gosh. There is really nothing more to add. I just can't believe it. So terrible. Amazing poem though.
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oh my god...this made me cry.
However, after reading your author notes, I do have one thing to say- something similar to what my friend said to an acquaintance of ours who spouted the same thing- "Suicide is selfish"
We think of it as selfish in our eyes because we, the loved ones left behind, feel pain. Have you ever thought about the pain the person who did it felt? I don't know you, and therefore will not assume that you've never known a dark time in your life. If you have, I want you to think back on it. There have been times when I contemplated suicide. Driven to depths of grief and despair that I hope to never know again..driven by horrible things I have seen and experienced, by the losses of loved ones and innocence..
Have you ever felt that?
I do believe that suicide is not an answer. I lived through my darkest times and am better for it. But some people can NOT see the light at the end of the tunnel, and maybe some are not as lucky as I was to escape and move on.
Is it not selfish to expect a loved one to live on in pain, depressed and desperate for release, just so YOU don't have to feel loss?
I'm not arguing or judging here, just trying to point out the other side.. I apologize for the novel! -
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I agree - interesting thoughts - and yes I have been in dark times. I think my religious beliefs kept me from taking my own life (I'm no longer religious), that and the knowledge of how it would affect my daughter's life. I'm sure some situations are just too frakked up for some people to go on living, and I can imagine such a situation. This poor girl didn't have all the facts unfortunately.
The funeral was last week. The suicide was more premeditated than I was aware. She bought Xmas gifts for those she was leaving behind and it sounds like she had thought it through thoroughly. The note to her mother was not a pleasant one and will haunt the poor woman until death.
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Wow...wow. This is an original poem..such a harsh ...wow. I...this sucks. Ignorance sucks.
I seriously just was with her. I was feeling the want to be a mother, and then when you wrote what she did..wow. You did an awesome job. I can't think of anything to say. -
Words can't do this justice-my heart hurts for those who knew her. I am sorry.
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aww, so beautiful
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grief drives people to do crazy things, some of which can't be undone. suicide seems selfish but not to those who do it. to them it seems that the world would be a better place without them. when you're deep in grief or depression you lose the ability to reason. it's really sad all the way around and you're words have captured this.
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OMG this is horrible! I am so sorry... I don't know what else to say.
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