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Peach


I wish...

I was the
perfect peach,

to feel your lips
upon my skin...

droplets of breath
before the kiss,
a warmth exhaled
from between your lips
tip of your tongue to
tease and tempt...
tantalising, tasting,
teeth bruising my flesh...

but...
only for a moment
before
 

the
bite
 

my juices
flowing freely,
cascading

  d
    o
      w
        n
 

satisfying your need
quenching your thirst
taken,
devoured
 
 
 
 
gone.
 
 

 

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  • paulcreates silver member
    July 20, 2008

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    Sue you must haver had some pretty stiff competition to only get an HM from this entry. Wow. Love the theme and how you've developed it down the page.
    Paul


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    July 4, 2008
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    Juicy.

    A woman to be completely consumed.
    Luvit.

    "my juices flowing freely"


  • Lexie - gold member
    July 4, 2008
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    wow

    very very well done indeed!

  • Clare
    June 28, 2008

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    Excellent poem

    Sue, you have creatively traced love's beginning to love's satisfaction.
    You wish to be the perfect peach for your love. I think you become that, in a way. For after the "bruise," your lover's lusty needs are quenched and GONE. My latest is "Capsized." Hope you can take a look and comment! Clare=user name; Claire T. Feild=real name


  • RowanMoon
    June 24, 2008
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    I'll never look at a peach the same way again! Enlightening


  • Randomly Beautiful
    June 24, 2008

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    If you tried to enter more than this piece I had it on only one entry. Sorry, you are allowed to enter up to three. It is open for you to do so now.


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    May 10, 2008

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    Whoo, this is hot. Made me wish my husband was home I really love this, you penned a very sensual write from the lovely little fruit. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • breedluv gold member
    April 27, 2008
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    I've always thought peaches were the most sensual of fruits. You have expressed this exactly!


  • Heavens Child
    April 26, 2008

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    whooooo.......very nice. You have teased and tempted us with your delicious words. Best wishes to you in the contest!


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    March 28, 2008
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    very sensual.


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 16, 2008

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    Got to love those juicy, rip fruits that make your mouth water as you imagine biting into one, juices dripping... vivid visuals in this poem. Great flow as well.

  • carole21
    February 27, 2008

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    nice

    nice write and picture as well . . love the font color too . . also liked "to feel your lips upon my skin" and "teeth bruising my skin" . . good ending


  • Amera gold member
    February 25, 2008

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    Wonderful! This is great! You make a kiss sound so very tasty... yum!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Swtpoetryman
    February 25, 2008

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    VERY SENSUAL AND JUICY!

    This was a very tasty and sweet piece - to say the least! Thanks SO MUCH for sharing it with me Suzy Q. since me supper is two hours away this piece made me very hungry and thirsty, indeed! I'm going to have to see what I can do about that to quench me thirst and satisfy me hunger before then as two hours is much too long for a naughty boy like me to wait.
    Peace & Love!
    Earl.

  • amysticwriter silver member
    February 25, 2008
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    Very sensual, who could resist...

  • Tercarro
    February 25, 2008

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    Wow

    This is either a very nive poem about fruit and or my mind is in the gutter because it was so sensual to boot. I'm not sure how to read this anymore because now I can't get my head out of the gutter or clear my my mind of so many wondeful thoughts that all include flowing juice and succulent flesh. Hmmmmm, once more a nice play on words and beautiful imagery here.
    Well done Sue.


  • moonbumps silver member
    February 24, 2008

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    Naughty but excruciatingly nice!!! Thanks for sharing this very sensually cheeky write xxxx Love Hilly


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    February 24, 2008
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    Well gosh this was a tasty write indeed Sue, beautifully sensual... absolutely loved it!!


  • ScottishPrincess silver member
    February 23, 2008

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    WOW!!,this is just awesome,its an eye opener,now your making me want a peach LOL,it just goes to show you can write about anything!,A delicious read:L lol,Hazel


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    February 23, 2008

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    Sue---I never knew you to be so "Sensual"!!
    OMG--I have a "New Respect" for you and you have opened my eyes wide, ya "little devil"!!


  • annamoy
    February 23, 2008

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    Oooh, they are one of my favourite fruits. Lovely sensual write and that pic is delicious too.

    Ann


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    February 23, 2008

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    Excellent

    A cleverly put together sensual write and I like the way you tranform this sensuality into a peach well done all the best Brian.


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    February 23, 2008
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    Wow. Erotic, sensual, a good rhyme yet so innocent. I like it. Very Very Very good poem.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    February 23, 2008

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    Beautiful and Sensual

    Sue, I love this. This is very very erotic, sensual and deep. Lots of imagery and seduction of the mind of the reader. Wonderful writing...

    Love
    Wayne Leon
    xx

  • Zyskandar A Jaimot
    February 23, 2008

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    this is a very strong erotic write - when do you get to the primal pit? ah - the very essence of that peach --- the pit enjoyed this thanks for sharing this taste with us regards zaj


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    February 23, 2008

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    i think this poem is a little, well risque,,i thought it might be a tad dirty when i read the title, and saw the juicy peach.. thankfully it is xxx pp


  • Gwenevere
    February 23, 2008
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    MMMMM!!!! Warmly erotic.Juicy but not too sweet.Well done on this one, Ros


  • arafura gold member
    February 23, 2008

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    I can see that inflaming a few passions on here my friend! You certainly hit the right notes with this very sensual and erotic poem. Liked the style too!

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