Pray my love will disappear
and take from me this ache I fear;
tormented in every way
for love will always be clichéd.
Overrated words and roses
taken in expected doses;
"Hearts aflame and full of passion,"
-out of date and out of fashion-
Dismal, small, and polluted,
'true love' often lies refuted.
Thus this life has been concluded.
Author notes
The clichés of love, and how it's really hard to be happy with sometimes.
A contest entry
- finding love by Hecate616.
350 points, ended March 17, 2008, 143 entries
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this is a very interesting poem and most entertaining. I enjoyed the rhyme scheme and flow that is set here. the last line is the kicker...Concluded is such a strong word.
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gah, isn't it crazy how their are so many cliches about love and love lost, yet once you experience it, you identify with all those cliches? i guess there's a reason their cliched...
Great poem, it wasn't very long so you have to get your message across quickly and concisly, which you did, and the flow was great!
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thanks and i totally agree! Love is so ironic and twisted haha. I love how you said once we experience it we identify with all the cliches, so true, so very true.
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