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Awash

like waves coalesce
along sure line's derided muddle,
unobtrusive, will awash

 

 

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  • zillion
    March 1, 2008

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    I like how the reader would automatically think shore line (because of the wave) but you chose to make it 'sure line's'. Nice word play.


  • Floorboards
    February 29, 2008

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    Quite trippy this one, it's like keep yersel to yersel and you'll be alright, stand up or out, yer fucked, don't challenge authority or society's regimented ideals and yel not be castigated. I'm rambling,
    but I like it a lot,
    thought provoking.
    Alex.


  • Tam
    February 23, 2008

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    love the word...

    coalesce...
    and awash...
    hope the judge loves this one as I do...
    good luck!
    Blessings! Tammy