listen as the piano cries
[and it cries]
for the stains of society
of whatever is left of humanity
Is there hope
for such a time where children can just be
what they were meant to be
[children]
no gun shots
no blood stain nightmares
just laughs
with sunday lullablies
and lovely friday sweets
reminders of playgrounds
of hand clap games
and tick tack toe
is there any hope at all?
the piano cries
there goes another war torn child
Author notes
This is for and about the children living in Darfur,Sudan Africa and other war torn countries.
It almost breaks my heart when I see the devastion of Genocide thats pleging all across Sudan and other African Countries.
A contest entry
- "Child, You Don't Say?" by 2lullabyhaven.
500 points, ended March 18, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - You Say You Want A Revolution. by La Tua Cantante.
550 points, ended April 17, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Poems about this utterly ridiculous society (Round 1) by Lyrical Rain.
525 points, ended April 14, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The unexamined life is not worth living: thoughts on humanity by Philosopher Gabriel.
1000 points, ended September 10, 2008, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Any advice would be lovely?
Comments
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Damn girl, this made me cry. It's heartwrenching and almost makes me angry in a way. Those children deserve a chance at making it in this world, and growing and being loved and happy. They are human beings and every human being deserves that. I think people often forget this kind of thing goes on in our world..thanks for this write!
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I felt what you were saying. I also love the feel and flow of the poem. Thanks for entering and good luck
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Truer words were never spoken, and yet we do nothing about it. We're in war time ourselves and we go on, buying expensive houses, expensive cars, bitching about how expensive gas is...and children are DYING...
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You are soooo good. I swear I can sit here and read all of these and never lose interest. Wonderful <3
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Amazing!
This poem is one of those poems you can see the "picture" in ya know? Congrats on the Gold trophy,
and good luck in future contest for this poem if you ever enter it again and hopefully you do.
SilverWolf
*HOOOOOOOOOWWLLL*
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Beautiful poem. I loved it. So good luck in my contest.
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This is amazing. I really like how it's written. And it really did almost make me cry, because sometimes we don't realize how good we have it until it is brought to our attention, and even then, some don't listen. Everyone deserves a childhood, but thanks to this genocide, some can't have one. My favorite part is:
"Is there hope
for such a time where children can just be
what they were meant to be"
This is an breathtakingly beautiful write. Thankyouu for entering my contest.
-Dana
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This reminded me of the Pianist.
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that was a pretty good movie
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I like it fine as is-thanks for your entry and good luck
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Impressive
I really like this poem!
Your good, keep up the good work.
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thank you lovely!
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