Falling
I can't find you
I can't reach you
The darkness
Impares my vision
Your lost
But, so am I
Without you
Unable
Where have you gone?
I can't find it
Your heart
Am I there?
Am I close?
Let me help
Please?
I want to
Bring you happiness
That's all
But I can't reach you
I can't find you
Darkness
All around me
What am I doing?
My eyes
Threaten to water
To rain down
Fall to the ground
But where is that?
The ground?
I'm lost
I want to help
But I can't get in
I'm not allowed
Will I ever be
Allowed?
Author notes
Just...something..personal
-The Dark Poet-
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Common meaning, though expressed clearly. You have a very direct poem without confusion, and it goes though the plot easily. Even though random thoughts, if you were to go back and change it, I would simply suggest you have an extended metaphore, you have very few symbolisms, so you should tie them together, to make your piece have more unity.
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