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Calling him back



carefully, she studied
the compass rose
and sent missives
tied to seagulls’ wings
in all the directions
he might have gone


and she waited
by the long pier
near the longer shore
beneath measureless sky
feathering her nest
with expectation


but in all her planning
and hoped-for conclusions
she never imagined
he might not wish
to be found

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Photo prompt
Title: The Scripps Pier, 1966
Artist: Ansel Adams

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  • Ithica silver member
    March 30

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    You are so good at creating bountiful and believable imagery... This was a pleasure to read! I had just read of a "compass rose" and tucked it in the back of my mind, you have used this image beautifully!!!


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    February 24

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    Such an amazing poem
    Congratulations on the silver
    A real creative piece of poetic art
    Julie

  • Sign of the Swine
    February 24

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    You create such vivid imagery whenever I read your poems. I can completely imagine the scenery that you describe and the emotions you are portraying.

    'but in all her planning
    and hoped-for conclusions
    she never imagined
    he might not wish
    to be found'

    That was a perfect way to end it. Great write.


  • CaptainRedd
    February 23

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    Congrats on the trophy, I think this has potential for more in the future, hopefully gold ones! I love the imagery, you did a splendid job with that!

  • KittenJubilee
    February 23
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    you definitely deserved a trophy. this is beautiful


  • daisybee
    February 23

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    man this was moving-you paint a picture, of a scene and the heart beating within it. Magic. Well done on your trophy-utterly deserved.

    . Rewarded 4

  • Still Gonna Shine
    February 23
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    a beautiful poem inspired by a beautiful picture


  • g-tonttu
    February 23

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    Fantastic write...One can feel the longing and the expectations. Also strangely I feel an ocean breeze going through my hair...the words come to life.
    The tone and flow are just fantastic.

    Keep up the good work,
    G

    . Rewarded 4


  • LadyGailofDalriadda
    February 23

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    wow, well deserved trophy! this is a very unique and eloquent write. It flows so well, and tho I am not often very fond of non rhyme, or free write as they call it I guess, I was completly raptured by this lovely write. It is very beautiful. Thank you so much for sharing it. It is a delightful read

    . Rewarded 6

  • Zyskandar A Jaimot
    February 23

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    the 'compass rose' eh? does anyone really wish to be found? seagulls + the name of a ship from HANK 8's navy quite entertaining good solid write thanks for sharing regards zaj congrats on the silver

    . Rewarded 4


  • Mirthryl
    February 22

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    Interesting "compass rose." Enjoyed use of "missive." Seagulls fit the setting. Love the second stanza; long, longer, measureless; and "feathering her nest with expectation." Usually unpleasant, but nonetheless relevant concluding stanza. One's hopes and another's wishes do not of necessity agree.


  • AliceinPoetryLand Moderators member
    February 22

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    Oh this is so beautifully penned. So sad but such wonderful thoughts that flowed with such hope.
    Congratulations on your trophy for a stunning write
    Gaylene


  • poetryality silver member
    February 22

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    This is gorgeous. I love the fact that the photograph is not added with your words but I can still see it. There are times in life when we wish hardest for those we love to return and they wish even harder that they never have to. That is sad but it is one of life's realities. An excellent take on the picture prompt. A stunning work! Thank you for this entry in my contest and I wish you the very best.


    Much Love & Respect ♥

    Renee

  • Kathryn Bowden
    February 22

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    wow! I love this! You tell such a story with this and paint a picture so clear I almost wish I had a frame for it!

  • JustBreathe gold member
    February 22

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    "and she waited
    by the long pier
    near the longer shore
    beneath measureless sky
    feathering her nest
    with expectation"

    Wow! Awesome work! I love the beautiful images and words conjured up in this poem ... a picture painted with your words. One waiting anxiously for love to arrive, but forgetting that love is a two-sided proposition ... and expectations sometimes are one-sided ...

    "but in all her planning
    and hoped-for conclusions
    she never imagined
    he might not wish
    to be found"

    Best wishes in the competition!♥


  • secberm
    February 22

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    Well it's not hard to find me! I'm easy like your poem, like N'awlin's streets like women at Hunts Point... Just easy to find. Hell, if you had a bottle of wine, I'll find you! One.

    Dez

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