Phantom Ship
She saw his ship sail in from sea
slowly drifting to the harbor pier
he'd been gone for what felt like forever
but finally, he'd soon be here
She waited in anticipation
time and distance had been much too long
today was the day she'd hold him in her arms
and her longing would soon be gone
She could see the mast through the mist
as it stood high above lingering clouds
it appeared to suddenly stop in time
she felt her heart beginning to pound
She ran to the beach to be that much closer
to the lover she yearned to touch
if wishing could make that ship move faster
then her thoughts would do just such
A tear began to trickle down
in her heart she feared something wrong
a premonition of something dire
for time was standing still too long
A closer look, through misty tears
her mind, in a state of confusion
the ship that took her lover to sea
returning in a cloud of illusion
It appeared to her out of the mist
and was retreating by the same
she knew her lover would not be back
clutching her heart, could she stand the pain?
Time after time, it would oft appear
a phantom ship in the harbor, calm
and for all those sailors lost at sea
unaware, they can never again come home
She could not endure this phantom sight
to continue reliving that fateful day
no longer would she be a seaman's lady
far from the memories, she moved away
~PennyLynne~
Author notes
Ok, it's been a while since I wrote a love story, so tell me what you honestly think! LOL
Jacqueline, thank you for the awesome pic (unable to post it here) that got me inspired to really write again
can also be seen at www.geocities.com/rubee99/poem16.html
Written November 25th, 2003
What did you think
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Tamara, always, thank you so much for your wonderful comments... I suppose in this case, it doesn't matter which is read first, part I or part II as they're not really a sequel, but a moment in time as seen thru the eyes of two different people...so in essence, the poems should be side by side....again thank your for reading and commenting...always appreciated
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Damon, thank you so much for your wonderful and encouraging comments...always so very much appreciated. I'm honored that you continue to come back and read whatever I have posted...thank you
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A beautiful tale as I knew it would be. Yours always are; in face you are one of the best here at Allpoetry. That is not to say that we do not have many good poets and poetesses, but you dear lady rank right up there at the top with the very best. Keep up the gret writing.
Damon D. Brewer -
well for me, I am pleased I read them out of order, but it just makes the love story that much more heart wrenching in saddness.
very well written
my hat off to ya darlin'
Tamara -
aww Jacqueline, thank you so much for your words of encouragement...and thanx for the pic...it really did inspire me to get writing again
That is so interesting to know Bud..and I'll have to look him and that poem up. It sounds very intriguing...especially that it was of your ancestor... that's awesome ...thanks for your wonderful comment and for reading...so much appreciated!!!!
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Wow....reminds of Henry Wadsworth Longfellow wrote about THE PHANTOM SHIP...and it was about a ancestor of mine. Vey good writing here my friend. ~Bud~
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Happy Thanksgiving Kathy and I do believe you wished me a happy one too when we had ours...anyway, I'm so glad you liked this piece...your visit is so much appreciated, as always
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excellent
You've come back with a bang!!! This is exceptional and beautifully written. The imagery is haunting and vivid. This is one of my favorites by you. Happy (belated LOL) Thanksgiving to you
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Aww thank you Wolfbane...and when I see 'Sweet Rain', it always makes me smile so glad to be back writing...it feels like I'm home again LOL...thank you for always being so wonderfully supportive!!! You're so very much appreciated
oh, and I guess I should be wishing you and all my American friends a Very Happy and Wonderful Thanksgiving!!!!! (we had ours in October LOL) Happy Holidays!!!
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And she's Baaaacckkkkkk! YAY!!!!
This has the feeling of a true classic, liek a story yet untold winding down and filling your mind with images as you watch her and feel the sorrow and not wanting to leave her. A really gorgeous write hun, it has a lovely allure to it the spins the tale so wonderfully that you fall into the mist as you read it. Great job!!!!
So glad to see you posting again, I've missed you. I hope you are doing better and that your holidays are wonderful
Brightest Blessings Sweet Rain 
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thank you Maureen...always such a pleasure to see you stop by... thank you ever so much for your wonderful comment
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EXCELLENT! REALLY ENJOYED IT!
This is a wonderful poem...so mysterious...then so sad! You are a great story-teller!!! Loved the rhythm and the rhyme...Well done, Penny...your poem was sublime!
<3 Maureen
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Barbara, thank you ever so much for always rushing to read my latest work...you are so very much appreciated!!! Your comments are always so wonderfully encouraging...thank you, thank you
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This gave me the shivers. Beautiful, haunting, and an excellent tale. It's great! The flow, the rhyming, the...everything! Using the lighthouse background added the touch of someone forever looking for loved ones.
Look out, AP...Rubee is BACK!
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