Mirror on the wall you lie,
Anymore and I shall die
Feathers weigh much more than I,
Mirror, mirror, must you lie?
Mirror, Mirror, thou art cruel,
You show me whale instead of ghoul,
Yet still I trust your word, a fool,
As day and night you win this duel.
Mirror, shall you ever cease?
Let my weary heart find peace?
As body, mind and life decrease,
Shall not be long till I’m deceased.
Mirror, Mirror you shant win,
I shall not die just to be thin,
I shall be more than bone and skin,
Mirror, Mirror, You shant win!
Mirror, Mirror, meet thy match,
I shall be free of you at last,
And I shall live to see you smashed,
N’er another soul to snatch.
Mirror, Mirror, thou art thru,
I’ve lived to see the end of you
To your lies I bid “adieu”,
Mirror, mirror, thou art thru.
Mirror, Mirror, I am free,
You shall never have power ore’ me,
You were the only thing to die,
Mirror, oh! At last, goodbye.
A contest entry
- What Is She Thinking? (Pic Inspired) by Asylaarix.
425 points, ended March 8, 2008, 24 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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deep
i like the take you used on this picture promt, somthing that happens way to often, i like the rhyme, congrats on your well earned silver trophy, keep writing, -Amy
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WOW!!!!
Powerful,I loved it. This poem is truely trophy worthy. Welcome to AP. You write with heart and feeling. That makes for powerful poetry.
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I LOVE this!!! Fantastic! Superb! Honestly I wish I didnt relate to this as much as I do. But I do...and I thank you for penning something so brilliant...Your message is honest and true and while speaking of a subject that breaks many down....you speak of strength in breaking that mirror instead. Did I mention I LOVE this poem? I am printing this baby up and taping it to my mirror. (how ironic is that? lol)
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I ABSOLUTELY LOVE THIS! I CAN FEEL THE PAIN, THE TWIST, THE PULL, THE EMOTION OF HATRED ... IT'S ME ... EXACTLY SOMETHING I WOULD WRITE! I LOVE IT SO MUCH ... THIS WAS DEFINITELY SOMETHING THAT HIT HOME FOR ME ... THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THIS LOVELY WRITE!
ON A SOFTER NOTE: YOU ARE BEAUTIFUL NO MATTER WHAT YOU SEE IN THE MIRROR ... MIRRORS SOMETIMES LIE ... MOSTLY WHEN YOU ARE FEELING OF NO SELF WORTH OR ANY WORTH AT ALL ... YOU ONLY SEE WHAT YOU THINK AND BELIEVE ... YOU HAVE TO BELIEVE THAT YOU ARE MORE THAN THAT ... YOU ARE A STRONG AND TALENTED WRITER AND I AM SURE YOU ARE THE MOST BEAUTIFUL GIRL ... DON'T EVER THINK LOW OF YOURSELF ... WE WERE ALL CREATED EQUALLY BUT WE WERE ALSO CREATED DIFFERENTLY ... AND THAT IS OKAY ...
THANK YOU FOR YOUR WONDERFUL WORDS ... AND GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST!!!!
JAYDA -
Amazing great poweral look at eating disorders
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Very powerful, and I can definately relate. The rhyme's done pretty well too, I like this. Well done, a good write.
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Wow
This is a very powerful write, that too many young woman can relate to. Other then the fact that you and I are both winners in the battle that many have lost, and some are still fighting. (I have fought with anorexia since I was 14) So thanks for standing up for a very real and ugly problem that is often times over looked as no big deal.
And, where poems go, I could find nothing wrong with it. That, is just about as big of a compliment as yours truly could ever give.
Well Done
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Very nice...
Nice poem, I liked it -
I love your rhyming pattern, and the way it flows. I can connect to the poem right away, and the picture matched perfectly. Great write!
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Extremely Amazing
The picture is so true and so are the words you have written. This is a wonderful piece and extremely well written and it just seems so perfect!
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oh wow! such a touching powerful write! and inspiring to pull from such control. amazing and talented write! many blessings and best of luck in the contest!
*stomps
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GOOD JOB
This poem is amazing and truely inspiring to those young females out there who think their fat.
GOOD JOB!
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God. This is so so very true. If only more girls could live through eating disorders and learn to walk away from the mirror. A wonderful, emotionl and very visual piece.
Good job and good luck.
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the picture is scary...its so sad how girls...women can let body image take over their lives
You address this problem quite nicely...I love the rhyming pattern. I hope many readers can get a lesson from this.
Good luck in the contest.
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ooooooooh!
wow... very good... an interesting topic... good luck in the contest! one critique - isnt the shortened form of 'over' written as o'er? im not sure, so sorry if im wrong. great ending!
u get 3 clappies!
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I have always had a thickness about me unless i would starve myself. i would be smaller for a while but then who I really am would resurface. Body image is such a big thing to us women. We need to take a chill pill. Be healthy but not so into being skinny. For what, to whom? Us or someone else, that is the question. I am glad victory had the final say so.This is a great poem with a powerful message, thanx, conni
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very good, i luv it!!! so very very true.
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Thats deep stuff.
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Excellent, this is a strong write for a very painful topic for so many, very thought provoking and beautifully written.
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Wow, that's really good! I completely understand what it's like to look in the mirror and see a lie, and you have captured exactly what it feels like into one poem. It's really good :]
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AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
So many look in the mirror and see its lies...and many do not win the battle with mirror such as you in this write.Your rhmye sceam is exellent!!! Your imagery here is briliant. This shuld be posted for all to read as many could benefit from the wisdom this poem conveys to the readers. Thanks for shairng this and keep on penning such profound truths!!!~~Toni~~
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Welcome to AP. Congratulations on posting your first poem too. Hope you enjoy your time here, reading, commenting, writing and entering contests. There are great instructors here too and you can take classes on most any kind of poetry by going to the Learn up top and clicking. You mentioned in your author page that you had an eating disorder and think you have done an awesome job with this poem you penned here. Great take on the picture - good interpretation. Good to have a happy ending in this poem. Again, welcome to this site - have a great day!
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Wow. Very deep poem. I wouldn't understand this affliction, but you have helped me understand what it must be like. thanx for sharing.
until exhale,
Grimoire -
oo♥ i like this i like the flow too
Dead Star--x
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