No! It can't be!
Horror fills my body
My stomach flops around
Then it's over
Peacfull serenity fills my existence
Quiet bliss overcomes my mind
There is no tommorrow
There is no today
Time does not exist
The world becomes meaningless
With no fear, no worry
Pain, hunger, guilt, all gone
Complete and utter
Shock
Author notes
I've never actually experienced shock this extreme, but this is what I imagine it to feel like.
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You know... I have experienced severe shock a number of times due to trauma and a serious car accident... and this is pretty accurate of what can occur.. first the pure rush of shock through you, adrenaline racing through your body.. and then the kinda stillness that can occur afterwards when your mind almost splits off from itself to try and cope with the situation.
Really great write!
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Well, I'm grateful I got it right. I'm glad your OK after the car accident, it must have been horrible.
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wow
This an excellent description of it. Yes it does feel like that.
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Intreresting piece of poetry my friend. I found it full of emotions and very descriptive as well. Looks like Massachusetts has another great poet here on AP. Nice to meet you neighbor.
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I haven't experienced this either, but this seems to be a good guess at what a shock that severe would feel like. You could use a bit more fleshing out, but not a bad write.
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Well well,
You captured it pretty well
for not knowing what it feels like.
Great job. And good luck.
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