Well before they sank the ancient well
Knights defended here on many nights
Fell behind the bank on Goathead Fell
Sights of horror seer the battles sites
Dark stories writers tell well after dark
Sleep starved they fought to fend off endless sleep
Mark the way the fighters left their mark
Deep evils then were taught a lesson deep
Not daunted are the great who formed the knot
Fast they stood and flashed theirs blades so fast
Shot down beneath the weight of arrows shot
Last blows were crashed on worm that cannot last
Great logs the servants piling on the grate
Fate is now surely smiling on this fete
Author notes
Goathead fell is a hill, the Well is a deep cave that local legend says was a well dug too deep so that a dragon (worm) was allowed to escape. There are ancient earthworks where the legends say local knights and villagers vanquished their foe.
The form is (I hope) a Shadow Sonnet, created by Amera .
100 points to the first to spot the added twist.
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Comments
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bravo
An absolutely superb shadow sonnet! Wonderful, delight, excellent! I loved it! bravo... bravo...bravo...
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Wasn't it the internal rhyme, then?
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It was but Allan spotted it first. And you've had enough of my points for one weekend
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What? Where? He did? Yeah but I got to it independently.
And those points I got by betting against a sucker. These I EARNED by being clever!
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If you got anything for being clever I wouldn't have to go to work tomorrow!
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I have sat here for two hours trying to figure that one out.
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Congratulations.....clever clogs!
Love
Sue
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You clever cricket you-something to work on maybe next when I am 'sonneting'.....
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Too clever by half! I spy an internal rhyme! Boi oh boi can you knock them out.
You are Colly Kibber and I claim my five pounds reward.
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witty tale of dragonslayers
Shadow sonnet that tells a tale of an ancient legend;
interesting form ,
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well done. cant seem to escape it.
well i guess no use saying the twist its already been done. and by the Queens hubby none the less.
whatever can i say.
passions
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Love the internal rhyme. Very well crafted. I like the homophones. I once wrote one with all homophones. You are one-upping me with the internal rhyme. Kudos.
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Reward sent and well spotted.
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Very good and yes it is a Shadow Sonnet. The story, the flow and the image are wonderful and penned in perfect form. I will add this to my list. The Shadow sonnet list is on all major search engines.
Love,
Amera
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