Holding hands, walking alongside the wrecked shore,
eyes looking upon the Lake with the wonder of a child.
The sky falls into the water
but nothing can hush up words
and feelings ascending from our hearts.
A flash of thoughts…
was that dark water’s deceptive reflection
trying to lure a few lonesome ducks
into a cruel illusion,
insisting on keeping up their faith
that the miracle of metamorphosis will turn them into swans?
The only light and warmth came from you.
We floated away
your touches pluming me
and I felt so white...
there, where the rainbow will rise again,
unchanged,
like our love.
Infinite.
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"The only light and warmth came from you.
We floated away
your touches pluming me
and I felt so white..."
A brilliant penning, my Friend. The title brought me to your door...I am a swan who thinks she is still an ugly duckling, but yearns to fly anyway. lol. The emphasis on the word "white" was a lovely touch; when love is pure, everything is a blank canvas, waiting for colors to rise anew. Brava, Poet. ~ Wanda
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SO BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!
It our loves faith and devotion that lifts us up and changes us into this person of love and beauty.
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Yes, when emotions turns me to be a swan...
~Sonja~
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a ballet of thoughts, turning desolation to the sparkle of wonder and ducks to the nobility of swans, all through the texture of your choice of words. like a miracle
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It is much easier to see it from the shore... Thank you for bringing me the poetical miracle of your own.
~Sonja~
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how truly beautiful is your story and metaphor, you are a gifted writer. I can always imagine the story as you write.
Tamara
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Dear Tamara, I am only trying to express myself my own way and I am so glad that you like it. I write a lot, all kind of stories and thats probably reflect to my poetry. I do not want to look pretentious pricing myself, you can find many so many fine poets on this site.
~Sonja~
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"The sky falls into the water" - beautiful image. The imagery is just MARVELLOUS. Love the use of italics too. Great lovesong, Sonja
- namita
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Dear Namita, now ... after your capitalized comment I have to sigh. thank you dear friend.
~Sonja~
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*sigh*
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Dear Tara... comments like yours are what poets are looking for. Thank you.
~Sonja~
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Beautiful imagery Sonja
What a wonderful poem of love.
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My dear friend, my poetry always came out of my soul and heart, the same as your great comments. Thank you.
~Sonja~
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oh this is so beautiful! i love the whole idea of the poem, and the imagery just lights up everything! beautiful poem!
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I am glad to see my readers satisfied with my poetical expression. Thanks for you always nice comments.
~Sonja~
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that's beautiful
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Thank you Dream Maker.
~Sonja~
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