In passion’s heat two souls intertwine,
invoking a miracle divine.
At the very first beat of my heart,
before I was me, life got its start.
Weightless tethered to my world within,
sensations of existence begin.
In this bliss, reassuring thoughts persist,
and there's pleasure knowing I exist.
Protected and safe in my inner space,
physical traits grow at a fast pace.
Not content with we, I must be me,
anxious to leave, I need to be free.
My eyes open in a bewildered stare,
as my empty lungs expand with air.
Abruptly, I instinctively weep,
then a magic voice lulls me to sleep.
The soothing sound of a lullaby,
calms me down and I no longer cry.
Acquiescing to my mother’s care,
I’ve made it, I’m finally there!
A contest entry
- Inside the womb by icyrose.
900 points, ended March 18, 2008, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Woomb Service by BluesMan.
2800 points, ended April 29, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Yet another rhymer I'm simply amazed to rhyme so well with this prompt and still stay on point. thank you for entering my contest.
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hmm very nice. I like how the poem is simple, yet very descriptive, and the flow of it is constant and harmonious.
Good luck, and thanks for entering!
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Very eloquent and aptly put. The miracle of life its innocence and joy. Good write neighbor. Happy trails
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infinitesimal spark
Your poem makes me wonder, we may never be more content with simply being than we are just before 'being'.Anything that inspires me to wonder is a pleasure, thank you for sharing!
'Protected and safe afloat in my inner space'
this was my favorite line.
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Wow! This is wonderful, and takes my breath away! So unique! -Tearyeyed
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