It all began in earnest when I dropped
by to visit you. We had not seen the stuff
upon the street as two abreast, we stepped
in some doggy doo. You welcomed, show-off,
as indoors we progressed, and tired, plopped
as friends are wont to do, our shoes not doffed
at door, (to pass the test of civility.) So inept!
Embarrassing too! To hear a strangled cough
at tracks across white carpet, always perfectly kept
now tracked brown goo! Visit changes to very tough
job with earnest apologies and no choice but to opt
for painful hours, shoe-less on knees. ENOUGH!
Author notes
It never happened. But--it could if the habit of leaving shoes at the door had never been taught!
(Check out those mid-line rhymes with "do.")
A contest entry
- FOR ALLPOETRY POETS : #46 : Picture & 1st Line Prompt by Lyndon.
1900 points, ended February 26, 2008, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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OH NO!!!
This is quite funny!
It's always the ones with the white carpet, too ...
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When I was looking for short poems to submit for consideration in OVWA I had not even thought of this one. (It did not really happen, of course.)
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HOODWINKED !
This is a delightful 'What If' or "could of happened" poem that has elements of humor, friendship and personal responsibility for ones actions. How embarassing this situation would be, don't want to be there, don't want the tee shirt! LOL Thanks for putting this smile on my face today.
You have been Hoodwinked today by The Poetic Bandits
because WE CARE! 
Dennis
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Two days ago! At last I found you had been here! If there are others I have missed may I send you apologies in advance. My proofreading commitment will dominate my life for the next year or so and fatigue is not conducive to new writing. Sigh.
I had forgotten this poem. Thank you.
Terry
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Hoodwink!!
This made me laugh, I don't think a few in my husband's family were ever taught to take their shoes off at the door, so this gave us both a good giggle! lol well done
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Thank you. It is a good thing to remember, considering the streets are not famous for their cleanliness!
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Funny
We are teaching our 6yr old this right now!!
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Thank you for finding this!
I taught it four times-- Girls are more receptive somehow!
Seriously though, I'm not sure why, but I had forgotten this poem existed! Saved and filed, it will not be lost again. Many thanks!
Terry
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The rhyme is noted but does not contribute, when read aloud, to the humour, really.
The content, most, brought humour to me.
Doggy pooper-scoopers are required through by-laws in most towns in Australia.
Even the smell rising from a lawnmower is enough for me!
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...Not only staining the carpet, but also wafting in that oh-so-nasty pong! Remind me not to invite you to my house!!
I must say, the internal rhyme lends this piece an extra interest and is well maintained throughout. I notice you also employ an end-rhyme pattern as well.
Thanks for this lively entry, and best of luck!
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Ha!
I love the rhymes in the middle of the lines. This could only be funny in retrospect!
Dog(giedoo)rel poetry?
I know, very punny!
Mike
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