evening gilded in golden kaleidoscope
stretched to the sea
easing upon boats
when the sea winks
the shore steals furtive glances
amongst probing glances of tidal waves
such is the sight unbeknownst
of the sun's fading elegance
to mellow
before retreating to the shadow of the hills
A contest entry
- PIF METAPHOR PROMPT CONTEST- Only 10 Poets, closes after 10 entries....This is to PIF for the gold I won in Mr. Penmans contest by Roaddog Wolf.
425 points, ended March 7, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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your metaphors were really
good and the poem a pleasure to read. I think you may need to use caps and punctuation, not having them removes from the quality of a poem when it comes to judging , at least for me it does. Good write though
Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest
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