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Writing

I'll admit where I sit now

my act was a crime

I set out to fall for the second place prize

Made a heap of my winnings

and tossed them aside

Your heart was the last thing

that was on my mind

I'll admit that I lost you

You didn't lose me

but I've always been gone

So my presence was free

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  • brooklynngirl
    March 26, 2008

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    very nice!!

    wow, i like this a lot! its very sensitive and (as the comment b4 me put it) 'deep'. i like this poem, and it effectively tells a story without overdoing the wording. short and simple. i like it!


  • chrisferris
    February 22, 2008
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    that's deep. i like it alot.