I am darkness… I am the oncoming storm…
I am the vessel et morti…
My dreams transcend the ages, but always…
Thou art there…
Fear me not, fore I wish thee no harm.
If I pursue thee with passion,
Then know it be for love…
I reach for thee and find thy heart is open,
And beats as one with mine own…
Thou hast doubts to be sure,
Yet ye give’th thy self so freely, resisting not,
For the garrison’s guard thy heart no longer.
And I will gladly find my place in the darkness of thy soul.
But alas, I’ve always been there.
Forgive me, my love…
For these immortal dreams weigh heavy upon my soul,
And in rebirth, I am a subject to their whims.
My soul doth grow weary of this accursed burden,
Toused from lifetime to lifetime,
Perceiving that which no man should.
Nor for sooth, would he choose too.
I am undone… I am so very tired…
Mine ancient eyes torment me with memories,
Of sin and debauchery of lifetimes past.
Yet how can I justify mine actions to this modern age?
I must atone to that which make’th me immortal.
Thy words, and dreams of thine embrace, sustain me,
And from my adoration for thee, I draw solace and strength.
For I truly am the Immortal… Your Immortal…
Author notes
This piece was inspired by 'Denizens of Darkness' by my great friend & Muse, PastleMoons. Check it out, its beautiful. http://allpoetry.com/poem/4914443
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A contest entry
- Dark Passions by DrkPoet.
450 points, ended April 8, 2008, 32 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Bronze trophy winner
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Honorable mention
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Comments
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all my brothers have a style quiet they're own and how I love yours .. this takes me out of my world into another realm.
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this is so beautiful,kind sir..thy wish that there would be others that wouldst write like that of we..and that thou art couldst teach them some good and higher form of knowledge..
together we take the world in'st to our own hands and spreadth knowledge and good will..
a wonderful write,love..
Sarah
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ohhhhh. . .so what shall I say, dear sir, to tell thee of how much like this. . .
So tragic and yet beautiful. . .and the pic is awesome. . .wow. I must think on it. . .Definitely three clappies for thee! 
Oh wow, that final line. . .
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namaste
Open hearts ablaze braco
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I loved it. The language is wonderful. The flow is superb.
So romantic, yet tragic, and that ending is beautiful.
I love the concept as well, it's a powerful thought that certainly makes me sit back and wonder.....
Great write.
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This has slipped into my favorites category. Welcome yet another one of your pieces into the finalists list.
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This was really good! I'm not that into freeverse though there are a lot out there that are really good. You have succeded in impressing me with this write.. I really liked this.. Well done..Best of luck..
Angel
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Ah, now this is a beautiful write. You ended it PERFECTLY!! Lovely!! I'm more into rhyimg but you nailed this freewrite. Great job! Good luck in my contest!!
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Again.
Glad to see you won the gold, it was clearly worth it. -
What a great style and poem!
Truly deserving of the gold!
The wickedness of the voice spoken in the poem really
gave us all the goosebumps, I'm sure!
Isn't it just so fun that we can twist light into dark
and dark into light by capturing these creatures of
the dark that love to speak their thoughts!
freaking us all out!
ears/Seattle loved it! great job!
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I can see.
This piece and the graphic you chose to go with it reminds me of a dream that I had last week. It was very real and I wonder sometimes if our minds do not tell us of what is to be. This is a very deep and interesting piece. -
wow, such a beautiful write. Such passion!! I can see why it won the gold trophy, it is well deserving of it!! Congrats! Thank you for sharing with us. Hugs~Nikki
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Wow what an thought provoking and interresting write. Wow past lives, I don't know of any but I do have alot of memories locked deep inside my mind that I have been told if they come to the surface I might go insane. Such vivid imagery and emotion throughout your amazing write. Congrats on the Gold well deserved! Thanks for sharing Theresa
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Stunning and ingenious words you have scripted here. The Immortal Soul.
"Forgive me, my love…
For these immortal dreams weigh heavy upon my soul,
And in rebirth, I am a subject to their whims."
I was enthralled by every stanza. This part struck home with me also;
"Perceiving that which no man should.
Nor for sooth, would he choose too."
When one does remember past lives and/or tap into the Collective consciousness, it is definitely both a blessing as well as a curse. Your poem reflects one who knows this very well. Congrats on the gold. Very worthy! -
Congrats on the gold!!
Wowzer! This is gorgeous! I love the old English, all sounds around me drowned out as I read, not often that happens
Captivating from start to finish. Congrats on a very well earned gold
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Hi , have a feeling it should be for the garrison gaurds thy heart no longer, congratulations on the gold, interesting poem, Di
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Awesome!! I suppose there are other words that could say how well written this was but that was the only one that came to mind. I love how this flowed and the usage of archaic words just made it better, I use them myself in a few things and enjoy seeing it when others do also. Thank you for sharing this and for entering it into my contest.
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I am so in-love with this piece
I never tire of reading it; reading you.
Thank you so much for this breath-taking honor.
I love it!
~Pastel
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