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The day cast light


The day cast light on this broken night,
As love fell adrift upon the farewell tide.
Dark clouds hang heavy over my heart,
Lost on the ocean that ripped us apart.
Emotions rage hard and crash in waves,
I am torn and my reflection is in pieces.
A storm of questions now batter my mind,
My heart is burst and blowing in the wind.
love is scattered like petals on hard rocks,
The day cast light but it did not find me.

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  • PerfectImperfection
    March 10, 2008

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    A thoughtful piece of sadness, sullen and bare. A good write. Thank you for your entry!


  • Grimoire
    February 23, 2008

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    My heart is burst and blowning in the wind.

    should fix the typo "blowing" not "blowining".
    A nice poem, though. Good luck.

    until immolation,
    Grimoire


  • SmudgedInk
    February 22, 2008

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    This is beautiful. "Day cast light", that is new and intriguing. Love leaving with the tide is such a beautiful image. This poem gave me many good visuals and the words are beautiful too.