Oh lady, please hurry and fasten your shoe.
The chimney's on fire, what are we going to do?
There's smoke coming out of the fireplace.
We haven't got time to put on your face.
We haven't got time for the right evening gown.
Good heavens, old lady! The house is burning down!
Will you stop looking for your favorite brooch?
Just look down the hallway. The flames, they approach.
We haven't the time for your Japanese pearls.
Will you please forget about doing your curls.
If you don't hurry, we'll never escape.
Will you please stop fussing about your opera cape?
The flames surrounded us. I fear we'll expire.
But at least you're dressed in your funeral attire.
Author notes
This poem was inspired by a dream I had about my grandmother, who was overly fussy about her appearance.
Written November 25th, 2003
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This is really great! Very rarely can one find a poem that is humorous and significant all at the same time! Yay for mocking materialism. This is a very good write! Thank you so much!
Riv -
Funny but sad commentary on materialism. We are willing to sacrifice all the important things for the trivial. Great closing line!
Jennifer -
chuckles....
this clinches it...
WILL be back to read more!
~liz -
This poem was actually about a dream i had. i was was staying with my grandmother (fussy sort that she was),and in the dream, the house was on fire, and I was trying to get her out of it, and she kept going back for some stupid thing or another, until we both got trapped by the flames!
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"The flames surrounded us
I fear we'll expire.
But at least you're dressed in
your funeral attire. "
In other circumstances outside of fire I would consider this extremely comical, however, to fuss over appearance in a fire...well...that seems rather a silly shallow thing to do!
Your poem is excellent both serious and humorous at the same time, a great flow of rhyme and meter...well done...Best of wishes...~genielassie -
Lol. This was very drrrrole. Very clever. I enjoy your poems for their simplicity and wit, as well as their form. I don't see many rhyming poems, but I think that it takes more work and crafting to make them in ballad form. Very good. I have to go help my mom making pasta, but I'll be back...
--phil -
Stomps foot MORE!
This is great! Perhaps I can relate?
Cause I am an old lady..lol
Easly read, with a even and fast beat to it..the images you painted by your words..and the others I made up as I read..what a wonderfuly cute poem..Cute maybe wrong word..but it is..lol..its funny and its real..
a great right!
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last stanza great
whole poem really funny
very nice read here
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