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A single strained note

A note rising above the rest
A crescendo
The music dancing through the night.

Join me in the embrace of the sound,
Softly lulling me to sleep
A great reaction, for the love of music.


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  • soccer220
    February 22, 2008

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    Ah...... very nice. I really understand what you are thinking here. Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • notorious gold member
    February 22, 2008

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    Remove the 'full on' crescendo...you'd say that maybe in real life, but it sounds too colloquial and awkward in a poem. There also should be a comma after the second line preceding 'The music dancing through the night.' Commas are your friend! =)

    "embrace of the sound"-Much better than real life embraces...hahah.
    "A great reaction"-=) How I feel when I listen to Technologic...or any song I like, really.

    Nice title...a single strained note...the longest note is a whole note. =) Just some random ass trivia...