Dark, Dead Harlot by MJ Donnelly at All poetry

Contrasted thoughts drift

like sauntering mist

amongst stark landscape

cold and quiet as her soul

and grief is a constant

companion that reminds

with a deliberate voice,

that true love is

not to be taken lightly,

nor to be sequestered

in any measure, so

she wanders sorrowed,

with distant memories of

true affection shunned as

agony pulls at her spirit like

sinister captors and coal black

is her heart that beats

no more, as eternity beckons.

Author notes

Just feeling a bit dark, so I decide to convey this in writing.

In a list

Dark • next in list

A contest entry

Picture Inspired... by SummerlandRayne. 519 points, ended March 2, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Dark Contest by Angelic Princess21. 550 points, ended March 18, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Death is but sweet despair... by Amber Rose. 700 points, ended May 26, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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DogFish
July 7, 2008
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Slow, somber and steady...like a funeral march!
Amber Rose
May 26, 2008

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sorry about that last one
Good write, even though I asked that I be the only one judging the poems submitted to my contest. Next time I will be more clear that I want poems that no one is judging or has judged. This one however I left in because I liked it. It had a calming sense of depression to it. I did not like however, the way it was formatted to be one entire sentence and the way it was broken in unconventional places. That I believe I did make clear in my rules. Overall a good write but next time try to adhere to my guidelines.
Amber Rose
May 26, 2008
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Good write
Angelic Princess21
March 18, 2008

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i like this write alot. and the picture is so fitting.
thank you so much for entering my contest.
best of luck to you.
~Angelic Princess~
Auburn Sunrise
February 24, 2008
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wow.... and I thought I had a dark side... lol
You totally blew me away with this one, hon!
First of all, I love that picutre!
I can't praise this enough. You do dark poems very well - you left no details out and still managed to leave it open to interpretation and imagination.
I love the ending.
I had to go back and read it again, and yet again - I just love it so much! This is perfet!
suseann
February 22, 2008

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This depicts a saddened rejected fem spirit in the eternal afterlife very poetically.
SummerlandRayne
February 22, 2008

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Tis dark...very nice take on the pic. The last verse is ominous...i like it! Thanks for the entry and best to you in the contest!

Az
MaMa-2-be-Cindy
February 22, 2008

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Wo Mj

Brilliant

I loved --
with a deliberate voice

that true love is

not to be taken lightly

Deep, yes even dark writing here

Cindy
kiwigirljacks
February 22, 2008

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This was definitely dark! I haven't seen you write this way before but I must say you did it brilliantly!!

My favourite part was:

"that true love is
not to be taken lightly
nor to be sequestered
in any measure
thus, she wanders
sorrowed,
with distant memories of
true affection shunned

You could have been writing about my own experience there!! Felt it... hit me hard!

Great piece of writing here!!!
Lady in Love
February 22, 2008

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Cast aside her agony, for her pain she lives in! What a wonderful poem. So dark and deep! I have to agree with my sister Nature...Good luck in your contest. Tisha
Nature Song
February 21, 2008

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'as agony and pain pulls
at her spirit
like sinister captors'

All too often I can relate to theese lonely words that are her prision. A lifeless love that went away...life seems so hopeless at times. Thank you for sharing this wornderful piece my firend. Good luck in your contest ~Sie