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Metronome


Beyond onyx eternity beckons
in burnished threads of sanity.

Opaque illusions breathing
steady streams of consciousness
into kaleidoscope reality.

To the shadows I leave faith
forged in arrogance of mankind.

Seeking beyond quivering roses,
their stems forming doorways
with enlightenment in mind.

Eden is there, awaiting discovery
and I shall claim it one more time.

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  • maa gold member
    June 19

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    your poem reads like a vision quest ...
    those are not just beautifully woven words eager to impress the reader - but teachings of wisdom wrapped into keys of light that guide the one who is willing into yet to be discovered depths of the unknown ...

    having a vision of "raven" now ...
    and hearing the voice of turtledoves calling outside the window ...
    maybe a message to claim the "peace" found in the great mystery of "the void" ...

    you have truly inspired my heart and illumined my day,
    thank you,
    maa


  • Ludovica
    March 19

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    Wonderful, beautiful

    I loved it. There's a gentle flow here, and you made every word count. Especially caught by "To the shadows I leave faith forged in arrogance of mankind". Well done, the gold is very much deserved.

  • penman gold member
    March 3
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    Excellent

    Wow, fabulous wording. Another incredible poem. Congrats on the gold.


  • Micro
    March 3

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    This one is truely Gold worthy. I can see why you won gold. When I read it aloud it just rolls off the tongue beautifully. I especially liked these lines:

    Eden is there, awaiting discovery
    and I shall claim it one more time


  • MissyMouse
    February 25
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    Hmm. o-o I like it

  • Amera gold member
    February 23

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    This is beautiful and the spritual image simply sings with the rhyme placed just as the title says like a metronome.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • suseann
    February 22

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    The spirits quest to delve beyond assumed mere faith,seeking truths without question is apparent to the reader. Because your ability to describe it in such apt poetic verse is wonderful! Nicely done Poetess!

  • ian sawicki silver member
    February 22

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    threads of sanity, i keep trying to get them through the eye of a needle but fail miserably a good poem.


  • poppa silver member
    February 21

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    Beautiful poem.....love it...ahhh peace of mind, what a treasure that is .....great take on the prompt.....good luck to you in the contest...


    Rob..


  • Whisper Mckee
    February 21
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    Eden is there, awaiting discovery great write.


  • Celticmoon gold member
    February 21

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    'Seeking beyond quivering roses,
    their stems forming doorways
    with enlightenment in mind.'

    It's not often I will pull a stanza or even a line from a write as a favorite but the above is a killer metaphor and I love it. It sits in my mind so well.

    I think this one over all is awesome but then you have a talent that is nothing short of amazing


    Blessings
    Bel

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