The changing tide of lovers faults
The lies that once brought us together
Now slowly but surely tear us apart
Ripping up the the fabric of something that just wasn't right
The spary of winters sea breeze
Reminds us of a time well lost
Of long awaited goodnights
Of lost causes wrapped up in the lonely linen sheets
I was tired of lying
Oh I was tired of waiting
Waiting for you
Tired of fighting
Just like the currents
Just like the sea
I'm changing
My love I'm changing
I'm gonna be right back into the sea
Waiting for someone else at beaches shore
Just waiting for someone else to adore
Author notes
Prompt 6 "I'm tired of fighting, fighting for a lost cause" Lost Cause by Beck
Beck is one of my favorite artists and lost cause is one of his sadest songs...the whole CD was his most depressing.
A contest entry
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Interesting. I really loved this. Thank you for the entry. Infinate clappys.
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This is beautiful! I love the deepness and the flow. Best of luck in the contest.
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Thank you very much!
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hey this was just beautiful. simple but with vivid imagery. nice use of words to bring out the images. i think the judge should have mentioned the rhyming rule earlier but i'm glad this didn't rhyme. good luck.
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Thank you so much...I didn't know that she wanted a rhyming poem...I figured she just wanted something passionate
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hey this is Dani the judge....i meant to tell people that i will be a little harsh or close to mean if i don't like what i read. if you read my work...i rhyme a lot. i like rhyming poems. it's just me...i can't help it. i like to have something i can repeat, but nothing in here rhymes except the last two sentences. but this was good. good luck.
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This is really good! It seems like you really nailed that prompt! Great job and I wish you luck as well. Much love.
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thank you so much!
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wow. i think this is my favorite by you. Its so deep, i've never heard the song before but this is gorgeous. Great job!
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I love it
This is exactly what I was thinking of with this propmt, and you did a wonderful job. Great images in my mind. I also think this is Beck's saddest song,but sometimes you're just in a sad mood, you know? Thanks for entering my contest and good luck to you!!!!
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i really like it, it reminds me of my breakup with my last boyfriend. okay, beside the point. umm...i loved the word use, and the use of the oh s in it. that really made it more effective.
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thank you!..I'm glad it reminds you of something...[besides the ex thing b/c ex boyfriends are errrr]
Thanks again for reading!
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