Leaving m'heart behind
I took frozen steps in time
blocking whispers of
thy pleads to live.
Soft words of purity
touched me as thy
arms fell limp.
M'ears still hear today
memories caressing
m'tearful eyes, piety.
'Twill not be long
I shall return to thee.
Sing to me m'darling
one more melody upon
natures breeze.
Embrace me sad soul
'twas here among the trees
we fell in love.
Author notes
deep emotion...reality
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired... by SummerlandRayne.
519 points, ended March 2, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Novy, I just want you to know that I know your heart has to be in shambles at the moment with the news and with your etched words of love knowing sadness lays heavy on your mind. You always seem to capture the moment you're in by displaying your emotions through the tip of the pen. I do know there is alot happening right now and hope your heart can find some comfort. Good luck in the contest.
Ted E
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Beautifully Written
Your poem is a masterpiece novy. Great imagery. i like the last words of the poem, beauty flows from them. Good luck in the contest.
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yes i felt the deep emotions in this you snatched my heart out it took a big pause reading this here i think its gold i love it great job
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that was beautiful. infact stunning. i loved it! its a nice change to read something in an old style of english. it was so sad and tragic. it was amazing. so glad i clicked
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This poem is simply beautiful. The lines all flow so seamlessly into one another. This poem speeks of something very deep and very beautiful; a love that transcends all. This writing is spectacular. Even the formatting is impressive.
I liked the way you rid yourself of the word "my" and made it like M'ears, as seen above. The ending sounds very sweet, but also very sad, reminding the reader that the one that she speaks of has passed on. I really loved the center verse, my favorite lines being:
"M'ears still hear today
memories caressing
m'tearful eyes, piety."
They way you tied in that word really changes the meaning of that one line, but only subtly, as though it has both meaning still.
All in all, this poem is quite beautiful and deserves quite a bit of praise. Well done. -
How beautiful...a splendid love poem! Tragic and dark. Just lovely dear...lovely! Thank you and best of luck in the contest!
Az
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