She doesn't look
She doesn't see
She opens up to nobody
And Figures out
She figures out
The narrow line she's walking
She can't descide
What to do
She's tried everything
Short of suicide
"She never hurts"
Her lie
Nearly works
Something is scratching
Its way out
Something she wants
To forget about
Part of you
That you will never show
She's the only one
That will ever know
Take it back
Where it all began
Taking time
Does she understand
What its all about
That her lie
Nearly works
Something is scratching
Its way out
Something she wants
To forget about
Something she can't deal with
All alone
She's walking that line
She's contemplating
Whether or not to cross
That narrow line
Where she would die
All alone
What she doesn't know
Is that she's not alone
But her suicide
Would be all alone
All on her own
With no one
A-round
Suicide
All Alone
"What she doesn't realize
Is that she doesn't need
To go it alone
I can be trusted
I can help her prevent suicide"
Author notes
Crazy-Dan Grand Theft Autumn
this is option 5 and option 7.
There is a to that story if you're intrested. Just ask for it through a message and I'll tell you.
A contest entry
- Life Is Beautiful. [Eight Options.] by La Tua Cantante.
545 points, ended March 12, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Bring It All by Simply Simple.
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Comments
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Wow, very nice. It was very well expressed, and had a good flow. Well done.
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Hmmm... I like the poem. I am curious to the rest of the story now though. This was perfectly penned and amazing. Thanks for the entry.
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I really like this. It shows that you care for her. I like the story in the author's notes a lot. These are really good lyrics. My favorite part is:
"What she doesn't know
Is that she's not alone
But her suicide
Would be all alone
All on her own
With no one
A-round
Suicide
All Alone"
Beautiful write. Thank you and good luck in my contest.
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Very good. You really showed the coarse, struggling emotion.
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wow, its great, the message it inspires is very powerful
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wow, I loved this, amazing song. This was like kinda of looking into a mirror for me, but yea, amazing song, and good luck tomorrow<3
~Ashley~<3 -
That's really good. I can see why everyone likes it so much. I wish I could hear you sing it. Good luck.
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