Still as deep waters
I vibrate in the warmth
of a euphoric world.
The umbilical cord of life
has connected me to the
self sustaining utopia of
an endless dream.
Here in the paradise of
my limited existence,
I explore every channel
of liquidity and light.
The streams of my survival
flow throughout vast corridors.
I am pure thought in motion
navigating the suspreme
dimensions of tranquility.
I sense a being of immense harmony
transmitting perfect fulfillment.
My laughter is mystic as
the realms of infinity.
Uncharted spheres of delight
acquired by osmosis.
Eruptions of discord disrupt
the foundation of sacred peace.
As foreign entities infiltrate
this embodiment of salvation.
Until the great unknown ascertain
poise in the sweet rest of silence.
Sudden movement leaves me
in a state of perplexity.
As I search for equilibrium
within my jaded soul.
Life nevertheless is wonderful
within the confines of this
nuturing organism.
At least until the waves of
turbulence extracted me from
perpetual serenity.
Leaving me in a state of shock
and very much pissed off.
That is, at least until
my eyes first met hers.
For it was love at first sight.
A contest entry
- Woomb Service by BluesMan.
2800 points, ended April 29, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow I loved the ending of this a very excellent poem!!!
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Oh those last two lines are just...I'm lost for words, they're so good. The perfect ending. And the rest is quite good too! (kidding, it's brilliant)
Peace Georgia
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Thank you so much for entering my contest and thank you for staying on point!!! This captured the essance of what I was looking for.
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This is great
Ah I read it twice for it truly grabbed me and had such a twist to it there at the end .Well done for sure
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This interesting.
This turned out to be very interesting and you certainly explained the life of the unborn before its birth. Everything from the first line to the very last you did well.
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You just took me through all 8 of my pregnancy's with this write I have often thought this the way a baby felt inside of me. This write is totally unique for a male poet, your talent and knowledge of the fetal being...is magnificent......
novy
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Off the chain once again
That was deep and philosophical. Tickling gently the grey lobes with wonderful thoughts. Very enojable piece man lol. Off the chain once again.
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good write for this contest good ending lines sort of witty cuz of situation "turbulence extracted me from
perpetual serenity." kinda tongue-in-cheek thanks for sharing regards zaj
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Very funny one! I love the bit about how the little foetus is pissed off about the turbulence in his Mummy's woomb as maybe too much bouncy-bouncy prod him a bit.
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