As I think back....
it all got a hell of a lot easier,
and I got better at it too.
I made them suffer...just as
I am suffering now.
Her face was like that of an angel,
an angel that I had to have.
The design was all too simple.
Had the rest of the family not shown up,
then their pathetic lives
would never have been taken from them.
SHIT! They asked for it.
While I had her tied up, oooohhhh
this is where I get an 'A' for creativity,
even Ed Gein would be proud.
Imagine how you would react to seeing
your loving wife, tied up and gagged
in the middle of the living room?
The shock....
The horror....
Heart racing.....
And then, without warning;
Night-night, the lights go out and
when you wake up; your legs are broken,
you are tied up and your eyes...
your eyes are sewn open,
so that you can see everything
that happens to your wife
and everything in the afterlife too,
and not be able to do a damn thing about it.
Hehehe.....yes that's exactly what
I did to that son-of-a-bitch.
But, their teenage son?
He must have been about 16 or 17,
but still he shouldn't have tried
to play the fucking hero
by trying to call the cops.
The phone is unplugged....
Then to flip me the bird?
As if that would hurt me
or my feelings?
Come to think of it....
do I even have those anymore?
At this point,
you wouldn't think so.
A blow to the head, knocks
him on his ass, so that I
can sit him next to his old man.
Now, let me teach this
little shit some manners....
Daddy smokes cigars, and keeps
his cigar cutter on the end table...
One.....
by
One....
I give him 10 reasons why
he shouldn't flip the bird,
and then....
One.....
by
One.....
I shoved them down
his fucking throat,
until he choked on his own fingers.
"How does your own blood taste, son?
I'm sorry, I can't hear you
with your mouth full."
Heh heh heh!
Back to the reason I came here.
As I traced her soft face with
my finger, all I could see
was this angels face and how
much I'd love to see it....
HANGING ON MY WALL!
Pulling my knife from my pocket,
I retraced the curves of her
soft pale skin,
until it slid into the palm
of my hands...
Then to preserve my work
of art for the authorities;
I covered each of their faces
with plastic wrap,
keeping it tight enough
to remove every last bit
of air from their lungs....
A bow to my audience,
and then I was gone,
with my prize trophy.
Their pain was over,
their suffering complete.
But, my pain...
Oooohhhh!
was just beginning.
But more than that,
the suffering.
Author notes
Background Courtesy of LadyDementia
Option 6
As you can see there is more dementia below
This is a continuation from my story ~Memoires of Murder~
Part 1
Empty Carcass
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3848603
Part 2
~Birth of a Killer~
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3924763
Part 3
~The Suffering~
http://allpoetry.com/poem/show/3944421
Part4
~A Voice Without Reasoning~
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4004399
Part 5
~My Masterpiece~
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4010999
Part 6
~Trick or Treat~
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4702575
Part 7
~My Madness~
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4765093
Part 8
~Judgement Day~
http://allpoetry.com/poem/5808785
Part 9
~Benediction~
http://allpoetry.com/poem/5830803
For the record, I have never killed nor intend to kill anyone this is pure FICTION
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A contest entry
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400 points, ended July 15, 2008, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Honorable mention
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wow...that is amazing. This scared teh shit out of me. But it is exactly what I want. Excellent work. Good Luck in the contest
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oh....
one thing i meant to ask. Could you fix your author's note please??
I may have added that after you entered this.....so it doesnt count against you. ^_^
in fact, i'm pretty sure that wasn't up when you submitted this entry..... -
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Thank you for the great comment, I am pleased that you enjoyed this and look forward to more. I plan to continue this story. Currently there are 7 parts to it.
Also, thank you for not DQ'ing me for that little oversite of the rules. It has been taken care of.
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HAHA!
i have said this before but this is AMAZING!!!!! I mean, the fear that woman must have felt as she watched her family suffer, and then feeling the cold steel of the blade against her own flesh......knowing the pain she was to experience at any given moment. I have had this problem since i was a little kid, where i'd have nightmares of someone being butchered and mutilated by a shadowed, unidentified attacker. Even now, at age 20, i still get the nightmares (dreams).....half of the time i wonder what it would be like to experience what the victims in my dreams experience.....
it really is an eery thing when you think about it. Thanks so much for your entry hun. This is a series you should REALLY continue! -
Well I was waiting to read a "Nice Bit Of Sick & Twisted Butchery" and you did not disappoint me...hehehe!!
A nice follow up to part one of this tale. Which is never easy to do. This should definitely be in the Top 3 places.
Good luck in the contest.
~T.S~
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very cool! it was an awesome work of art thanks for enterin
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"I give him 10 reasons why
he shouldn't flip the bird,
and then....I shoved them down
his fucking throat,
until he choked on his own fingers."
This was frickin' epic! Awesomely twisted, something I don't even know I might have been able to think of. Totally fits the prompt. Really outstanding work here.
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Thank you very much.....glad you found this to your liking.
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Well done, I think Potrait of a Killer is a title taken by Patricia Cornwell? I dunno I'm too lazy to look it up.
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I am not sure....as I haven't looked it up either
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Definately, it's the way all the disturbed people turn out... they were suffered by, then make others suffer and ultimately suffer again themselves. Ah well, such is life. Nicely done.
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*shudder* Good greif this is amazingly penned. It seems as though you've gotten stuck in the mind of a killer before. And the cigar cutter? A twist and a half right there. Great story. :]
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Thank you for all your reads and clappies....I appreciate it very much. Glad to see you liked this and I will let yolu know when I post another of these..
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This was sweet. A little internal dialog from a serial killer on a boring Wednesday evening really hits the spot. great background. You really ratcheted up the tension in this, getting inside the killer's head perfectly. Not a guy I would like to meet. I love the part about cutting off his fingers. That was well-expressed. Lots of horror and terror in this piece right here. This is a great evil poem.
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I must be a) blind for not seeing this before and
twisted cos some of it made me giggle. It is an awesome piece, the imagery is divine! The evil creativity, sewing eyes open, sheer genius This is a fine, fine piece, deeply dark and somewhat amusing. Congrats on such a superbly penned poem! Best of luck in the contest
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Thank you...I have some pretty tough competition since you are entered in most of the same contests as this is...lol Aren't we all just a disturbed bunch...lol
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Intense and there was something truthful about this, I really enjoyed it. There was almost a humour to this piece, or maybe I'm just insane. Good write and best of luck in the contest.
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thanks for the comment. I have to say that you are one of the few that has been able to pick up on the bit of humor to this...
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Nicely done here!!! I am impressed that you threw in Ed's name....I have never seen a horror movie or anything but I definately know who this man is!! You rocked this and made me want to go read your first 2 "chapters"......Best of luck!!!
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Thanks for the comment and clappies...much appreciated. I have never seen a movie about Ed Gein either, I just know alot about him through my stepson who studies alot of serial killers..lol
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WOW!
THIS IS AWESOME!
i don't think i breathed the entire time i was reading it, lol
my face was inches from the fuckin screen.
CONGRATS AND KUDOS! ^_-
Thanks for your entry
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Thank you, I am glad you enjoyed this. This is part 3 to a collective story I am writing about a crazed serial killer...
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your portrait is absolutely horrifying... to think that people actually think like this is just plain eerie... well done on the next installment... just had to read it through to the end... you think you need more victims then i will give you my ex's address...lol
cheers
Jen
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thank you Jen,
though all victims are fictional in this story, sorry..lol
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OMFG!!!!!!!!!
this is awesome!!!!!!!!!!
the attention to detail is superb!and i was just floored by the story line,
its EXCELLENT my friend,
i think the Prince of erotica has found an untapped Raging inferno of a talent!!!!!
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Oh, wow.... Indeed, you have done a wonderful job, and it was so twistedly brilliant! In fact, I felt like I was in the room, watching the whole scenario play out like a stage production or a film... Very cool!
As TBP said, Ed Gein is one who has always freaked me out, but also piqued my morbid curiosity, and that would make the narrator quite sadistic and horrid indeed! Great job!
Laura
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Thank you very much for the comment, I appreciate it.
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stunning piece my friend! Your vivid imagination has done this write justice
lol - have to tell you though - Ed Gein is the one who makes me shake my head the most and considering as this author would assume he has done better than him, he must be absolutely HORRID!
nicely done - enjoyed it thoroughly!
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Now honey... this is creepy... you think too much like i do at times... .wow. am still blinking in shock...
*deep breath... exhale*
ok.. very well done, methodical, maniacal and eerie as all hell... especially when I think about my son and daughter... I could see this happening without the hubby.
Keep it up!
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Wow! and I mean...wow!
Powerful, dark, sinister and just a rockin out piece of poetry, my friend!
Awesomely done!
Wishing you the best of luck in this contest!
~Heavenly~
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