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Scent Of A Memory~

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I remember trains
and the sound they made on those nights
lying fearful of that last call

and as March winds near,
I can taste the pain

as my tresses sway;
a fool to think I could run away
from these roses, rekindling

the scent of your memory.

Fourteenth day of February
came and went.

Yes, it's still my favorite day.

I still see you standing here,
holding one white rose behind your back,
your eyes, smiling sunlight

and I fall to my knees
shaking my fist at the stars, they lied
when they said time heals all wounds.

twelve years after
and my spirit still lies shattered,

your Valentine written on my heart.




♥♥



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In loving memory of Eloy, my best friend
7/27/54 - 3/31/95

I miss you♥


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  • Forgotten truth
    August 22

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    This was an amazing write, I think there are Meany things been said in this... from the star I through it was about someone who ran away, and then I wondered if it was you. But the poem seems to speak of someone who ran way and came back 2 weeks later, and nothing had changes, I love the train in this... paints the picture so well...


  • Melee Vau gold member
    August 10
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    reading thru tears

    tenderly sad, I feel the pain on a lost soul mate


  • trekkergirl
    May 19

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    I like this... your imagery is done well. Your flow good and smooth. Your emotion dead on. I feel your grief. I have asked those same questions.

    Good write. Thanks for sharing this with us. And thanks for entering this into my contest.


  • penman gold member
    April 24
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    Excellent

    What a terrific creation. And so well expressed. Very deserving of the gold. Congratulations

  • ashjoe76
    February 6

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    Very Good

    It's a complex affair to speak of someone who means a lot to you - when shades of joy and sorrow flash across those memories. You have done it very well...reveals how controlled your thoughts and poetic craft are. Congrats and best regards!


  • michael thomas
    July 6, 2008
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    a tribute par excellence.

  • bluecollarlove
    May 29, 2008

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    Very nice

    Getting late but I look forward to reading more of you.The title really drew me in.And it was a joy to read.

  • Bob Fox
    May 29, 2008

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    love

    love and the despair it can bring when a heart is shattered yet still hangs on a thread of hope. Tis a wonderful penned poem from a golden heart


  • zochit2me gold member
    March 25, 2008

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    The emotion pours through this and it is felt on my heart. I can tell this person meant alot to you. Memories are meant to remember, that is why they call them memories and no matter how much time passes, they remain memories. Congrats on you gold, well worthy of it.

    Becky


  • poppa
    March 22, 2008

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    What an absolutely stunning dedication...the beauty in this just leaps from your pen...absolutely amazing..."smiling sunlight" just grabbed me completely ...Bravo..


  • PerfectImperfection
    March 11, 2008
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    ...

  • PerfectImperfection
    March 10, 2008

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    Wow. This is such a touching piece of penning. The sadness is penned eloquent, with such a familiar embrace of hearts to conjure the memory. Excellent write! Thank you for your entry!

  • ea silver member
    February 25, 2008
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    a rush of emotion...

    ♥


  • Grimoire
    February 23, 2008

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    Very pure. The essence of a moment completely defined by a memory.

    until exhale,
    Grimoire

  • tara wilson gold member
    February 22, 2008

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    Speechless...


  • poeticweaver gold member
    February 22, 2008

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    *tears*


  • poetryality silver member
    February 22, 2008

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    Funny but I hate the term; "time heals all wounds". In the event of losing someone I dearly love...time is of no relevance. I still miss them as if it were a day after their death. You have my sympathies for your loss. Your poem is beautiful, sad yes...but beautiful just the same. Your words spill from a broken heart. My prayer is that you find some way to collect all the shards and piece them back together knowing that your friend, Eloy sees none of the darkness that we know in this life. He has passed over that threshold that we have yet to cross. He is well, and smiling at your memory of him. I see the white rose vividly. Sniff the fragrance of memory with delight. You were a true friend and so was he.

    He wants you to know; he will always love you but you must move on. There is someone right around the brink waiting to take your hand, don't turn him away, he is good.


    Much Love Always ♥

    Renee


    • poet2angels gold member
      February 22, 2008
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      Renee

      your comment touched me more than I can say
      Thank you so much for knowing exactly the right thing to say, my friend,....

      Lynda


  • Fug-azi
    February 22, 2008
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    We all have memories of people lost but few, if any, can express it such as this.


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    February 22, 2008

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    Heart Breakingly Beautiful!

    I really love the way this poem was penned my dear sweet Aunt Lynda. I always recognize the deep depth and beauty you prodice into poems about someone you loved so much and miss dearly. any ways this really touche dmy heart and made me :'( because its so sad that such a wonderful person left this world at such an early age and even sadder because you are right when theys ay that time heals all wounds where I still have one myself after I lose Kristy depsite being 3 years March 12th *sigh* any ways this is an awesome poem and keep penning away n good luck


  • jasminerose
    February 22, 2008

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    Oh my Sweet friend.. I am bawling my eyes out over here I can barely type
    This is so heartwarming yet so very sad and touching. A beautiful and outstanding petal you have shared from your heart! I know how much he meant to you and how much you still hold him so dear to your soul.. the love of friendship never ends, it is steadfast within your every sigh, and he is watching over you, sighing that your paths in life came together and united with love. He is always with you SIS..still holding that one white rose and beaming, knowing this one memory gives you a smile
    I wish you all the best in this contest and here is a for just because
    Love Jazzy


  • Peteskid gold member
    February 22, 2008

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    think the truth is more or less here, we hold on to what we can, and what we cannot forget; memories link our present to our past emotionally too...so very well done here, from the heart ...PK


  • Night Hope gold member
    February 21, 2008

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    "I still see you standing here,
    holding one white rose behind your back,
    your eyes, smiling sunlight

    and I fall to my knees"

    Sighhh...I know this place, my Friend. Lean on us, Sweetie. We'll help you rise again. A beautiful, sensitive penning. Good luck in the contest. I won't say I know how you feel, but you know I understand. Wanda


  • StarEyes
    February 21, 2008

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    I know what you mean, and it hasn't been that long for me. I know this is a red but thought I would leave you one just the same. As the white rose is my favorite too. I am sorry for your loss hon, and I know it is something that words can do nothing for.

    You did a great job on this one! I love it!!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    February 21, 2008

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    Such a sad yet, beautifully written
    story you have penned here. There
    is so much emotion and imagery in
    this. Well done my friend and good
    luck to you with this one in the contest!
    Always a pleasure to read you!




    Jeremy0826


  • kaibab silver member
    February 21, 2008

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    Such a story of unending love...I do believe angel poet that we are healed without forgetting...in the winds of March our kites fly higher...and we look at earth away from boundary...such is love to light you pages


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    February 21, 2008

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    This one touched my heart to the very core, sweetie
    Yes, of course, I DO understand; more than I care to admit at times
    I'm sure Eloy knows how much you still love him and how much you miss him....
    A beautiful tribute, hon
    Love ya,
    Sandy

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