Restricted Information, read the label on the file
Eagerly I opened it, and read it with a smile
Very interesting were the pages placed within,
Each a revelation of mankind's illicit sin:
Lovingly I savoured every vicious word and phrase
All the history of Man penned from his earliest days
Then my heartbeat faltered, as a presence filled the room
Instantly I closed the file, as one might close a tomb.
"Open it again," the voice of Satan filled my ear
"Now you have eternity to learn what's written here.."
In a list
A contest entry
- Acrostics-four options by TabbyCat.
450 points, ended March 10, 2008, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow
This is wonderful. I loved the way it read like a story. Plus, a great, great ending. Good luck in the contest.
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Your acrostic form is clever and fine,
the crown is revelation in the last line.
How harmless prying seems, how fun;
but habits form, the damage is done.
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Whoah. You have really captured my attention here. I LIKE this! Not many of the other poems in the contest ended so strongly. You managed to stay inside the restrictions, and yet make an incredible impact with your words. Great job.
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Very Nice! I love the way you rhymed it and kept the theme running without a break. Acrostics are fascinating...this one is!
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PS--I also like that you chose a word prompt no one else chose...kudos to being different! We'll see what TabbyJoy thinks!
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A fascinating take on this prompt. It reads like a continuous flowing poem/story and not like an acrostic. Also, I did not see that ending coming...you don't learn the truth until it's too late. Very nice! Hopefully, that doesn't ring true in your life. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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That is amazing...thats all I can say!
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