There's nothing quite like sitting on a train
You're wondering what thrills the trip will bring
As countryside rolls past the window pane
And you listen to the songs the wheels sing
Mountains in the distance travel too
But stations and their towns flash by half seen
In the seat that faces me is you
Smiling at the passing country scene
Another smile is hidden in my face
It's driven by the thoughts of things to be
The reason that we journey to this place
And also that you're travelling with me
Adventure on a train has still more charms
You cannot drive your car in lovers arms.
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I love this Jeff! This sonnet simply sings. Now I'm going to have to take a train ride.
Love,
Amera♥
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Make it a good one, this one is really a mixture of two journeys, one 30 years ago and one four or five, both were beautiful.
The 08:14 each morning, is not!
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yet another nice one but after the other i see anothers eyes looking back at you.
thanks for the visual.
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Trucks do nicely as well.
Point well taken. The train gives complete freedom to feel about if you know what I mean.
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who says? once't i had a'lover' sitting on me as i drove my porsche - but that was a 911sc not just your average/plain old car! ha! very good write about train rides probably does have more charms good ending couplet good title 1st line inviting to read more 'secrets' are always fun on a train yes? thanks for sharing this very good write regards zaj
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I like the sense of anticipation in this poem, just enough is said to hint at the intimacy between the travellers and yet, it remains as contained as a secret shared.
'Another smile is hidden in my face
It's driven by the thoughts of things to be'
The title adds to this 'just you and me...' to seal the bond and make it special
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