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The House of Woe

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The House of Woe


I have lost my soul in the House of Woe
wherein I found the timeless stroke of doom.
‘Twas built upon the graves of those below
and there the seed was placed within my womb.
I am the whore that guards the House of Woe.
My purpose here is simply to consume,
the lust of those returning from the dead.
I lay beneath them keeping passions fed.

The house sits on the open gate to hell
and I have lost my soul within these walls.
My body has become an empty shell,
I spread my legs whenever Satan calls.
Within the House of Woe is where I dwell,
enticing him with lace and silken shawls.
I am the mortal link to earthly sin
as tears of blood do weep from 'neath my skin.

So enter in and taste me if you dare,
the key to hell is yours if you so choose.
Just lose yourself within my beauty fair,
I am the whore that’s here for you to use.
So when I have you safely in my lair
and know you're lost and simply can’t refuse.
That’s when I trade my place with you my dear,
you’ll be the whore and I will disappear.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

An Ottava Rima is a poem written in 8-line octaves. Each line is of a 10 or 11 syllable count in the following rhyme scheme:
one octave poem. abababcc
two octave poem. abababcc, dededeff
three octave poem. abababcc, dededeff, ghghghii

 

I think the need to transfer and escape our own sins is human nature.

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  • HakuoBlake
    February 27, 2008

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    You definetly deserve the gold cup. And the imagery was awesome to hell and back. You are very talented, and you portray yourself well.


  • penman gold member
    February 26, 2008
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    Excellent

    Wow, fantastic use of the ottava rima form. You are so gifted at these.


  • Lexie -
    February 26, 2008

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    well, well, well....

    what exactly do i put here?
    nothing i can say can compare to the excellence you have penned, both me and Fire were bowled over with this one, it has everything we were looking for.


  • second-born
    February 25, 2008

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    "So enter in and taste me if you dare,
    the key to hell is yours if you so choose."

    Oh my..this piece is so powerful! I love all the great and specific images of your piece as well as the strong tone it projects...and who could deny the horror a sinner will have if he would waste his life trying to escape his sins...this is a super amazing write!!!


  • Tam
    February 24, 2008

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    OMG!

    damn pretty lady...this is a chilling read!

    That’s when I trade my place with you my dear,
    you’ll be the whore and I will disappear.

    OMG!!!!! you rock...this is amazing...the rhyme alone leaves me frazzled...but the storyline...is EXCELLENT...you weave true magic into your writes...
    this is begging for gold tin...indeed...
    your skill is truly mind blowing...
    Blessings! Tammy




  • Desire gold member
    February 22, 2008

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    Holy Mother of Pearl Jam!!

    This had me from beginning to end and the images stun the Mind to want more
    Magnificent piece to get the energy elevated~~
    Raised the hairs on the back of my neck
    just how I like it

    Love the form~
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

  • Papagallo
    February 21, 2008

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    This poem is so dark and so erotic. I read it several times and found more and more lines to like and read over. You, my dear, are a temptest with your words. The entir epoem was dark, erotic, and exciting. You have many poetic talents.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    February 21, 2008

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    OK I am so impressed I went a little overboard I hope it still meets the needs of the form. I hope you enjoy the compliment another stanza tomorrow

    The house of the creep

    A dreadful sadness haunts this ancient house
    Born in the graves that lie within its walls
    And of the madness of the owners spouse
    Who never saves the victims of its calls
    Her only source of gladness is to douse
    The hopes of slaves to evil and its calls
    She scratches at an itch that kills her sleep
    That nasty minded witch they call the creep


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    February 21, 2008

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    WOnderfully dark and lustful
    The form, awesome



    Cindy


  • Nangaleema
    February 21, 2008

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    Captivating, haunting subject matter - sent a cold chill down my spine. The last two lines are particularly insightful.
    The syllables flow so freely, like natural speech. A masterful execution of form - not at all contrived.
    Great job. - NANGALEEMA


  • Ithica silver member
    February 21, 2008

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    You have woven a deceptively opaque vision of desparation and darkness. Sin for sin it is a very chilling write....


  • dust -in-the-wind
    February 21, 2008
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    this was a nice poem nice job


  • Poetry-and-rhyme
    February 21, 2008

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    wonderfull princess this is so greatt i love every bit of it so darkkk but its just awesome i love it loads goodlucks in the contest princesss

  • cricketjeff gold member
    February 21, 2008
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    Dark and fantastic (literally) a superb use od a classic form Ottava Rima comment to follow but that is too good not to comment at once, I love these uses of old forms, wonderful.


  • PerVirtuous
    February 21, 2008

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    This reminds me of my entry into Lanes contest for some reason... Wow, when you put on the dark mantle you don't fool around. You go for it. I think this is brilliant and meaningful. I get the message and it is very effective. Three enthusiastic bunnies.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    February 21, 2008
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    This is a corker, sis!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    February 21, 2008

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    Wow! I actually got chills reading this, so I guess it was quite effective and stirring, but then again I do have a very vivid imagination. Great work Lady Amera and best wishes in the contest.


    Love and peace,
    mj


  • Faeryn
    February 21, 2008

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    This is dark and creepy...but still very very good! I love the first and last two lines of the third stanza.
    -Tay


  • StarEyes
    February 21, 2008

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    Girl you never cease to amaze me with your many forms! This one is dark and intriguing. Almost like it is removed from something, not sure if that makes any sense, but that is how I saw it.

    Oh I don't know, just rambling today

    It is great!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta

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