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About any given Thursday

 

 



A plumber could be in the pub
instead of fixing her leaky tap,

drop after drop, becoming incessant
almost boring,
a hole that diverts her thoughts.

The hairdressers'

where women let their hair down;

literally, cascading colours fill the floor
talk of sex
men
jesus
the bomb
the landing on the moon
and water rates.

The "old dears" with the blue rinses

queue up for their pension/pittance
dis/orderly roles in the post office,
one by one they collect
what little they didn't already have.

How they love to complain, about the price

of this/that/fish and other things that

cannot be mentioned.


Then there are the pale-pallid twitching people

that parade up and down outside the pharmacy,

waiting for their methadone script/ a quick swallow

- down/then gone.

Val, at number 80

wont hang her sheets out today

it's that awful pissy rain

soaks you through;

she shouts at you as you walk past

to get your milk and bread

from Ashraf's corner shop.

 

All of this in one day-

what of life and love

and the splendour

of raindrops

on the budding honeysuckle?

 

what will happen on Friday?

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Esmereldatitswallop
    June 12, 2008
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    Painted a very vivid image in my minds eye! Brilliant Gilly


  • kvwriter silver member
    May 26, 2008

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    This is stunningly disturbing, Gill, and really grips the true heartbeat of humanity--the human condition. It rains with painful honesty and causes me to ponder the budding honeysuckle just so I can get the image out of my mind.

    Captivating and well done. Hope you have been well, my friend! Love to you!
    Kel


  • Wandika gold member
    February 22, 2008
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    New chapter

    Book is getting thick Gil.
    Always an interesting read.

    Jim


  • Lute
    February 22, 2008

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    Hey! isn't this Thursday's Girls, Wednesday being much the same but different.
    Hey! this part should read thisaway:

    talk of sex
    men
    jesus
    men
    the bomb
    men
    the landing on the moon
    men
    and water rates.

    (not to mention who's in love with whom)

    hehe--Lute beauty parlour lady expert, amongst other things acourse.)

    Yeh yeh he best at being dilatory.





    • NurseChilly gold member
      February 22, 2008
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      I always thought of you with a quiff type of thing goin on... roflmao

      LOLOL


  • cvillelisa
    February 22, 2008

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    It is strange isn't it? How strangers become friends in the "beauty parlor" as my Ma calls it. And I suppose no matter Manchester or Centerville and maybe even Baghdad, the talk is pretty much the same.

    This would read most lovely as a piece of prose too without the line-breaks. Often I think that of your work that they make a wonderful collection of essays on Ladies Life.

    what will happen on Friday?

    it will snow and everyone will be talking about that.

    Nice to read you Nursey.

    Lisa

  • Rowan gold member
    February 22, 2008

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    So vivid...
    I love to look at the world through your eyes...
    so realistic, yet ultimately extremely poetic. Brilliant.


  • Namita
    February 22, 2008

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    Oh My Goodness... the images come alive here. The whole poem unrolls itself in one's mind; every image forms a crystal-clear image in the head. A ordinary day- an extraordinary poem- only an exceptional writer can do this. An amazing piece, Gills. OOh, and just LOVE the title.

    - namita


  • Elora Danon gold member
    February 21, 2008

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    Another day in the life - and some of us are lucky to see poetry in it.

    e~


  • Cat gold member
    February 21, 2008

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    wow do i like the bustle and
    bruises of this moment captured in perfect imagery and time- your gift for
    speaking of your world
    is just wonderful.. - you more than anyone i know paints a picture..
    wonderful wonderful

    m

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    February 21, 2008

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    Oh my, you bought the "blue-rinse brigade" to life, bless 'em all along with the general hub-bub in the hairdressers, yes it's so true, they do discuss the most intimate things along with the most banal whilst being pampered and preened! You have a talent for observation and being able to relay it so that the reader feels as if they are there and can see and hear these conversations and characters. Liked the wordplay
    of pension/pittance and dis/orderly, you subtley infuse societal statements and make points without hammering them home. I smiled at the mention of Val, surely every street has a Val? I have nicknamed ours News of the World and quite forgot myself when another neigbour told me something and I asked " Did News of the World tell you ? " Without batting an eyelid she replied " Yes, News of the World told me! " Ahh, the rich and the not so rich in the tapestry of life here and about on any given Thursday.
    Well done!


  • misselaineous
    February 21, 2008

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    you do this soooooooooo well, rich tapestry of the everyday, woven into reality with aplomb
    i much prefer your day to mine... even pissy rain would be better


  • IronIcecream
    February 21, 2008

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    existence needs methadone
    back and forth between the hairdresser and ashraf's
    sheets hanged to dry and pissing skies
    gossip and whys
    needs metha swallowed and mini byes


    • NurseChilly gold member
      February 21, 2008
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      the ache of limbs and life huh luv.... yes

      thanks Alex...

  • tara wilson gold member
    February 21, 2008

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    "The "old dears" with the blue rinses"




    I LOVE this poem....


  • ca ne fait rien
    February 21, 2008

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    Ah but Gill, it is this real stuff that makes poetry- it *is* the life and love and rain on the honeysuckle.


  • billyd1012
    February 21, 2008

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    that is a day of holes diverting thoughts. I hope it is fixed and there is something better to copy tomorrow. wow.


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    February 21, 2008
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    the chit chat in a hair salon always makes me smile.. as people talk about a life I find entirely unfamiliar.. lol

    I haven't been to one of those places in ..hmmm .. about ten years... when my hair gets too long I go in the loo, and chop it off where I figure it's appropriate... then put my hat back on

    I like the way this captures all that [most often inane gossip] and the bustle of everyday life going on around it.

    • NurseChilly gold member
      February 21, 2008

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      it was the most surreal conversation in the hairdressers today... most weird and strange.. almost therapuetic... and oddly disturbing too... lmao


      • ArtFullyMe gold member
        February 21, 2008

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        oh I don't doubt it... lol are they ever NOT surreal??


        • NurseChilly gold member
          February 21, 2008
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          of course.... I always come out feeling a little giddy and silly - ahem - what's new huh???


  • Jonathan Wikkins silver member
    February 21, 2008

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    well, if all that haopens on thursday, it does make you wonder what will happen on friday, not to mention monday, tuesday, wednesday...

    good one!
    mike

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