sunrise glow
nestlings cheep
patient cat waits
A contest entry
- ~ Haiku ~ A contest for all Winklings & their Friends #54 by Lyndon.
1000 points, ended March 1, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is something one could see in the spring. Cats are very patient hunters.
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Chances are
it is your cat!
Thank you for this fine poem and an amusing one as well. What season? Cat season!!
Thank you.
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List
Hello there!
I like what you have done in this haiku.
But it reads like a choppy list. I've heard that haiku should only have one punctuated stop, but you have two here. Do you know something that I don't?
I'm learning this caper, so i don't really know what I'm talking about, I'm just trying to apply my limited learning.
best of luck in the contest.
have a gr8 day,
BJ.
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OH!!! Those cats!!!
They might be my cats, actually, and I apologize. Your haiku springs me into the scene and I am chasing the cats away. 
Now the mother bird is chasing ME away! 
See? your haiku bursts into life. 
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Very clever mum. Brought a smile to my face. I was able to picture the scene you painted vividly. Well penned and much enjoyed. Best wishes in the contest.
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